School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct prepositions, and avoid unnecessary words. Give one specific supporting detail (e.g., a facility) using a linking word.

예시: My school is a Police Line Model School located in my village. It is well known for its facilities, such as a modern science lab, which many parents value.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition and fillers. Use one or two clear reasons with linking words (because, and) and specific examples instead of vague phrases.

예시: Yes, I like my school because the teachers are experienced and the school has good learning facilities. For example, the teachers offer extra help after class, which has improved my grades.

제안: Make a clear topic sentence and give two concise, specific reasons. Remove hesitations and avoid repeating 'famous'—explain what makes it good (teachers, resources) with linking words (because, and).

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place to study because the teachers are experienced and classes are well-resourced. For instance, small class sizes allow teachers to give individual attention.

제안: Use precise adjectives and structure: one topic sentence plus supporting details with linking words. Replace vague words (cool, kind) with specific descriptions (quiet, friendly, peaceful) and give an example.

예시: The school environment is quiet and peaceful, and teachers are friendly. For example, students often study in the shaded courtyard, which feels calm and homely.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and explain logically with specific reasons. Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases; use linking words (because, so, therefore) and an example or consequence to support your opinion.

예시: Interest in study is very important because it motivates you to keep learning and improves concentration. For example, if you enjoy a subject, you are more likely to study regularly and achieve better exam results.

× My school is a police land model school. It is located my village and it's very famous for its facilities.

✓ My school is a Police Land Model School. It is located in my village and it's very famous for its facilities.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'my village' to indicate location. Also capitalized proper name 'Police Land Model School'. Use 'located in' to show where something is situated.

× Of course I like my school most because my school is very famous for its facilities or uh, teachers and, uh, lots of students to admit there because of the learning, uh, skills very good.

✓ Of course I like my school the most because it is very famous for its facilities and teachers, and many students are admitted there because the quality of learning is very good.

Awkward and incorrect phrases: use 'the most' for superlative preference (adverb/adjective usage). Replace 'or uh' with 'and'. Use passive 'are admitted' for students being accepted. 'Because of the learning skills very good' is ungrammatical — rephrase to 'because the quality of learning is very good'.

× Yes, I think my school, uh, good for its study because it's very, uh, famous, uh, and uh, lots of students to admit their, of their studies and also the teachers are very experienced and they're, uh, their behavior also good.

✓ Yes, I think my school is good for studying because it's very well-known, many students are admitted for their studies, and the teachers are very experienced and behave well.

Missing verb 'is' after subject. 'Good for study' should be 'good for studying'. 'Famous' better as 'well-known' in context. 'Lots of students to admit their, of their studies' is incorrect — use passive 'many students are admitted for their studies'. 'Their behavior also good' should be 'behave well' or 'their behavior is good'.

× My school's environment is very cool, very kind or very silent place. Also the teachers behavior is very kind and the nature is like a like you feel your home, you stay in your home.

✓ My school's environment is very calm and quiet. Also, the teachers' behavior is very kind and the atmosphere feels like home.

'Cool' and 'kind' are not the best collocations for 'environment' — use 'calm' and 'quiet'. 'Silent place' is awkward; 'quiet' suffices. Possessive 'teachers behavior' needs an apostrophe: 'teachers' behavior'. 'The nature is like a like you feel your home, you stay in your home' is wordy and incorrect — rephrase as 'the atmosphere feels like home'.

× Umm, obviously focus our goals is very important for your study. If you, uh, if your aim is 1, uh, like, uh, you fulfilled your aim one day. That's why your study is very important. You focus then you.

✓ Obviously, focusing on our goals is very important for your studies. If you have an aim and you work towards it, you will fulfill it one day. That's why studying is very important; you must focus.

Pronoun and gerund issues: 'focus our goals' should be 'focusing on our goals'. 'Your study' better as 'your studies'. Sentence fragments and tense errors: 'if your aim is 1' unclear — interpret as 'if you have an aim'. Use future 'you will fulfill it' for expected result. Final fragment 'You focus then you.' is incomplete — replace with 'you must focus' for clarity and correct verb form.