School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use correct grammar and more natural phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct verb usage (use "is located"), and avoid comma splices by connecting clauses properly. You can also add one brief specific detail about the city to enrich the answer.

예시: My school is located in Bryansk, a city in western Russia. It’s about 400 kilometers from Moscow and is known for its forests and history.

제안: Make the answer clearer and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Use past or present verbs correctly and avoid repeating "because". Keep it concise (max 4–5 short sentences).

예시: Yes, I like my school. It accepted both me and my brother when our family moved from Armenia to Russia, and we were short of money. The teachers are supportive, which helped us settle in.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and then contrast two viewpoints using linking words (e.g., "however", "on the other hand"). Correct grammar and phrasing ("in our country", "not the best choice"). Provide one specific example to support each viewpoint.

예시: It depends on your goals. If you aim for top universities in our country, this school may not offer the strongest preparation. However, if you prefer a calm environment with less pressure, it could be a good choice because classes are smaller and teachers are patient.

제안: Avoid fillers (uh, ironically) and use correct verb tenses. Start with a direct statement about the past environment, then link to the present change with a clear linking word (e.g., "now" or "since then"). Add one specific detail about what improved.

예시: When I was studying, the school building was old and needed repairs. Since then it has been rebuilt, and now the classrooms are brighter and have new computers and furniture.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and correct grammar ("interest in study is important", "it plays"). Explain logically with one or two specific reasons and a linking word like "because" or "therefore". Avoid repetition and fillers.

예시: I think interest in study is very important because it motivates students to work harder and learn more. For example, a student who enjoys a subject is more likely to revise regularly and perform better in exams.

× My school locates in Bryansk, it's a city in Russia.

✓ My school is located in Bryansk, which is a city in Russia.

The verb 'locates' is not used for a school to describe its position. Use the passive participle 'is located' or the stative verb 'is' + place. Also use 'which' to link the clause describing the city. Suggestion: Use 'is located' or 'is in' to describe location (e.g., 'My school is in Bryansk').

× Yes I do, I like my school because it's the only school that accept me and my brother to study because we are move with my family from Armenia to Russia and ha haven't that much money.

✓ Yes, I do. I like my school because it's the only school that accepted me and my brother to study when we moved with our family from Armenia to Russia and we didn't have much money.

Multiple issues: 'accept' should be past 'accepted' because the action happened in the past (Past tense issue ID 5). 'We are move' should be 'we moved' (past tense). 'ha haven't that much money' should be 'we didn't have much money' (article/auxiliary and wording). Also add commas and separate sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Keep past tense for past events and use correct auxiliary verbs for negation (didn't have).

× If you want to go to best university so our countries I don't think that it's the best decision.

✓ If you want to go to the best university in our country, I don't think it's the best decision.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'best university' (Article errors ID 22) and incorrect phrasing 'so our countries' should be 'in our country'. The sentence otherwise uses present simple correctly for general statements. Remove 'so' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: Use 'the best university in our country' for correct article and preposition use.

× But if you want a calm school and not that hard education, it's your choice.

✓ But if you want a calm school and less demanding education, it's your choice.

The phrase 'not that hard education' is awkward. Use 'less demanding education' or 'education that is not too hard'. 'But' is acceptable; main issue is word choice (Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs ID 13). Suggestion: Use clearer adjectives and comparative expressions for clarity.

× When I was studying, uh, the environment was old and uh, when I go to university, ironically my school is rebuilt and nowadays it's much better.

✓ When I was studying, the environment was old, and when I went to university, ironically my school had been rebuilt and nowadays it's much better.

Tense consistency problem: 'when I go to university' should be past 'when I went to university' (Past tense issue ID 5). 'is rebuilt' should be past perfect 'had been rebuilt' to show the rebuilding happened before the time referenced. Use commas for clarity. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistent for past time references and use past perfect to show an action completed before another past action.

× I think interesting study is so important and it's play a key role because interest and, uh, people can reach more than the than ones that not interested in study.

✓ I think interesting study is very important and it plays a key role because interested people can achieve more than those who are not interested in studying.

Multiple issues: 'so important' is informal but acceptable; 'it's play' should be 'it plays' (third person singular error ID 2). 'interest and, uh, people' is unclear; use 'interested people'. 'reach more' is wrong collocation; use 'achieve more'. 'the than ones that not interested in study' should be 'those who are not interested in studying' (incorrect pronoun and verb forms). Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb agreement ('it plays'), correct relative pronouns ('those who'), and proper gerund 'studying'.