School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear, direct answer in one topic sentence saying where your school is and when you attended, then add one supporting detail. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct; use linking words (for example, “and” or “then”) if you add information. Avoid mixing places or tenses.

예시: My school is in Uttaradit, a small town where I studied from primary to secondary school. I later graduated from Authority College in the same region.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No and a short reason). Then give one specific example of why you liked the school using linking words such as “because” and “for example.” Use correct pronouns and simpler verb forms.

예시: Yes, I loved my school because the teachers were very supportive. For example, they stayed after class every evening to give me extra English lessons which helped me improve.

제안: Answer directly and then give one clear reason with specific details. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and precise vocabulary such as “small school,” “quiet environment,” or “supportive community.” Keep it to two sentences max.

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place to study because it is a small school with a quiet and calm environment. This peaceful atmosphere helped me concentrate and grow more confident as a student.

제안: Begin with a concise topic sentence describing the environment. Then give one or two specific aspects (rules, discipline, teacher support) using linking words like “for example” or “also.” Use correct nouns and adjectives and avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: The school environment was very positive and orderly. For example, teachers emphasized discipline and patience, and they often gave extra guidance to help students develop consistent study habits.

제안: State your opinion clearly in one sentence and then support it with a specific reason or example. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., “foundation,” “career,” “practical skills”) and correct grammar. Keep it concise and logical with a linking word such as “because” or “so.”

예시: I think interest in studying is very important because it builds a strong foundation for a future career. For example, being interested motivates you to learn practical skills that are useful at work.

× Since I was younger, my school is in Uttaradit, I study in Uttarakhand is a small town are since primary school to the secondary school and I graduated from the university at Authority College too.

✓ I went to school in Uttaradit when I was younger. I studied in a small town in Uttarakhand from primary through secondary school, and later I graduated from Authority College.

The original contains multiple sentence structure errors, run-on sentences, incorrect word order and mixed tenses. Break long run-on into clear sentences, use past tense consistently for past events (went, studied, graduated), and place modifiers correctly (a small town in Uttarakhand). Use conjunctions and prepositions properly ('from primary through secondary school'). Suggested improvement: separate ideas into sentences, keep consistent tense, and use correct prepositions and word order.

× Yes, of course, I love her life my school because the general teachers and the help willing to help me to study English when I was younger in every evening, they spend daytime to teach me about the extra card about the English and help me to improve my.

✓ Yes, of course. I loved my school because the teachers were willing to help me learn English when I was younger. In the evenings they spent time teaching me extra English and helped me improve.

The original misuses pronouns ('her life my school'), has tense inconsistency and unclear phrases. Replace incorrect pronoun with appropriate noun phrase ('my school'), use past tense for past experiences (loved, were, helped), and correct collocations ('spent time', 'extra English'). Suggested improvement: avoid unnecessary pronouns, keep past tense for past events, and use natural collocations.

× Yes, I think my school is a good place for study because this is a small child which have a quiet place and calm is great for growing up and have a simple comfortable life for the people to to be a adult.

✓ Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because it is in a small, quiet area that is calm and ideal for growing up. It offers a simple, comfortable life for students as they become adults.

Original has sentence structure problems, incorrect noun choices ('small child'), subject-verb disagreement and awkward phrasing. Use 'it' to refer to the school, correct adjective order ('small, quiet area'), and match verbs to subjects. Clarify meaning ('students as they become adults'). Suggested improvement: choose correct nouns, ensure subject-verb agreement, and order adjectives properly.

× In my school helped her good environment for example is have a good plan and have a good manner in the school and teacher sacrifice itself to help student to learn about the discipline, patient and consistency in their practice that's helped the good.

✓ My school had a good environment. For example, it had good plans and promoted good manners, and the teachers devoted themselves to helping students learn discipline, patience, and consistency in their practice, which was very helpful.

The sentence incorrectly uses pronouns ('helped her'), has tense errors and ungrammatical clauses. Use proper subject references ('my school', 'it'), past tense for past facts ('had', 'devoted'), correct reflexive pronoun use ('themselves'), and correct nouns ('patience'). Suggested improvement: use accurate pronouns, correct verb tenses, and standard collocations ('devoted themselves', 'learn discipline').

× I thinks it's important to interest in the study because of study is a bill you to have a good career in the future and is help you to have a experience like a a practical skill to use in the future when you work.

✓ I think it's important to be interested in studying because studying helps you build a good career for the future and gives you practical skills and experience you can use at work.

Original has subject-verb agreement error ('I thinks'), incorrect expressions ('interest in the study', 'study is a bill you'), and repeated words. Use simple present for general truth ('I think', 'studying helps'), correct verb patterns ('be interested in studying'), and clearer phrasing ('build a career', 'practical skills and experience'). Suggested improvement: ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct verb + preposition patterns, and simplify phrases for clarity.