School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับประโยคให้กระชับและเป็นธรรมชาติ ใช้โครงสร้างนำตอบตรงคำถามก่อน (topic sentence) แล้วเสริมรายละเอียดสั้นๆ โดยหลีกเลี่ยงเสียงรบกวน (uh, and) และแก้ไวยากรณ์ เช่น การใช้ preposition และการจัดคำให้ถูกต้อง

예시: My first school is about one kilometre from my home, so I usually walk there. I enjoy it because I can meet my close friends on the way.

제안: ตอบตรงคำถามแล้วขยายด้วยรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจน หลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่ชัดเจนหรือผิดรูป (เช่น "memorial", "the curious") ใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและเชื่อมประโยคด้วย linking words สั้นๆ เช่น "because" หรือ "and"

예시: Yes, I really like my school because it has a friendly atmosphere and lots of green space. I grew up there with my best friend, so it feels familiar and comfortable.

제안: ตอบให้ชัดเจนและหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำซ้อน ใช้ประโยคอธิบายเหตุผลที่เป็นรูปธรรม เช่น วิธีการสอน สิ่งอำนวยความสะดวก หรือนโยบายของโรงเรียน แสดงเหตุผลโดยใช้ linking words เช่น "because" หรือ "so" ให้ถูกต้อง

예시: Yes, I think it's a great place to study because teachers are supportive and lessons are balanced with practical activities. This combination helps me learn effectively and stay motivated.

제안: ตอบโดยเริ่มด้วย topic sentence ที่ชัดเจน แล้วยกตัวอย่างรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ต้นไม้ บรรยากาศตอนเช้า เพื่อนและครู หลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำคำและเติมคำเชื่อมให้ลื่นไหล (e.g., "for example", "also")

예시: The environment at my school is peaceful and green. For example, there are many trees, the air is fresh in the morning, and people are friendly, which makes the campus relaxing.

제안: ตอบด้วยโครงสร้างที่ชัด: ระบุความเห็นจากนั้นอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างเป็นระบบ ใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม (e.g., "apply", "solve problems") และหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำ หลีกเลี่ยงการใช้เสียงอืมมากเกินไป

예시: Interest in study is very important because it motivates us to learn and apply knowledge in real life. Without interest, we may struggle to solve problems or adapt to new situations.

× My first school is nearby my home, uh, around. 1 kilometer distance so I like to go to school with the by walk and and I very happy to study there because it's close friends there have.

✓ My first school is near my home, about 1 kilometer away, so I like to walk to school and I am very happy to study there because my close friends are there.

Prepositions and phrases: use 'near' instead of 'nearby' with 'my home' or 'near my home'; use 'about 1 kilometer away' to express distance; use 'walk to school' not 'by walk' or 'the by walk'; include the verb 'am' for 'I am very happy'; express location of friends with 'my close friends are there'. Suggestion: practice common prepositional phrases of place and distance and include appropriate verbs for states.

× My school is full of memorial.

✓ My school is full of memories.

Word choice: 'memorial' is a noun/adjective referring to a monument; the intended meaning is 'memories', the plural noun for recollections. Suggestion: choose nouns that match the intended meaning and use plural if multiple items.

× We grow together with my best friend and the the curious, uh, surrounded by natural and we're very happy.

✓ We grew up together with my best friend, surrounded by nature, and we were very happy.

Tense and structure: 'grow together' should be 'grew up together' to indicate past shared upbringing; 'the curious' is unclear and likely wrong; use 'surrounded by nature' not 'surrounded by natural'; maintain consistent past tense 'we were very happy.' Suggestion: use clear noun phrases and consistent tense; replace unclear words.

× Yes, my school is so good. It's such a good place to study because, uh, we study with uh. With the love, teach and play together and balance so it's make me happy and.

✓ Yes, my school is very good. It's such a good place to study because we study with love, learn and play together in balance, so it makes me happy.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: use 'makes' (third person singular) to agree with 'it'; 'study with love' is fine; 'teach' should be 'learn' or 'are taught' depending on meaning; 'in balance' or 'balanced' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with subjects and choose verbs that match intended meaning.

× In my school is very good environmental, uh, natural people, people are friendly and uh, the, the in the morning, the the pure air and the front will refresh In my school is.

✓ The environment at my school is very good and natural. People are friendly, and in the morning the fresh air and the scenery are refreshing at my school.

Prepositions and word order: use 'The environment at my school' rather than 'In my school is'; 'natural' as adjective describing environment; 'fresh air' instead of 'pure air'; 'scenery' or 'grounds' instead of 'the front'; use 'are refreshing' for plural subjects. Suggestion: use 'The environment at...' to describe setting and pick appropriate nouns for natural features.

× Study is really important because if we uh, do not have any knowledge or any lesson to adapt in uh, real life, we cannot to handle the, the issues or, or solving problem.

✓ Study is really important because if we do not have knowledge or lessons to apply in real life, we cannot handle problems or solve issues.

Verb forms and sentence structure: remove extra 'to' after 'cannot'; use 'apply' instead of 'adapt' for using knowledge in real life; use parallel structure 'handle problems or solve issues.' Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and avoid unnecessary particles; choose verbs that convey intended action (apply, handle, solve).