School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear. Start with a simple topic sentence stating the location, avoid unnecessary phrases (e.g. “thank you for giving me this answer”), use correct prepositions (near, in), and keep it concise (1–2 sentences). Add one specific detail to make it informative (e.g. distance or nearby landmark).

예시: My school is in the eastern part of my hometown, about a ten-minute walk from my house. It’s located near the main market, so it’s easy to find.

제안: Answer directly, give a clear reason, and use specific examples of what you mean by “facilities” and which subjects you find unimportant. Use linking words (because, for example, so) and avoid vague phrases like “something.” Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I don’t really like my school because it lacks basic facilities such as a science lab and a library. For example, without a lab I cannot do practical experiments for biology, which makes learning difficult.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and use correct vocabulary (e.g. ‘far from’ not ‘for far’, ‘difficult to manage’). Use linking words such as ‘because’ and ‘therefore’. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid awkward words like ‘conquer’.

예시: No, I don’t think it’s a good place to study because it’s far from my home and most students have long, tiring bus commutes. Therefore, I would prefer a school closer to where I live to save time and energy.

제안: Give a clear, coherent description. Avoid irrelevant or unclear references (e.g. ‘John took another tree’). Use concrete details about the physical environment (green spaces, buildings, noise) and link ideas with words like ‘for example’ or ‘because’. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: The environment at my school is mostly green, with several trees and a small garden where students can relax. For example, teachers recently planted new trees, which makes the school feel calm and pleasant.

제안: Focus on the question and give a clear, structured answer: state your opinion, explain why, and give an example. Avoid irrelevant words and repetition. Use vocabulary like ‘motivation’, ‘understanding’, ‘career’, and linking words such as ‘because’ and ‘for example’. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Interest in a subject is very important because it motivates you to study more and understand the material better. For example, when I’m interested in a topic I spend extra time practicing, which helps me achieve better results and improves my chances of success in my future job.

× My school is near with my home in the hometown in the circular in the big eastern country.

✓ My school is near my home in my hometown, in a town in the east of the country.

The original sentence uses incorrect and extra prepositions ('near with', 'in the circular') and unnatural word order. Use 'near' without 'with' to show proximity. Use 'in my hometown' for location and 'in the east of the country' or 'in an eastern region' to describe a broader area. Remove redundant words and reorder for clarity.

× Unfortunately, I don't like my school because in my school I don't have any facilities to learn something and my other subject is not important for me right now.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't like my school because there are no facilities for learning, and my other subjects are not important to me right now.

The sentence has problems with 'have any facilities to learn something' and article/quantifier usage. Use 'there are no' to state absence of facilities (There be issue as well). Use 'facilities for learning' rather than 'to learn something'. 'Other subject' should be plural 'other subjects' if more than one, and use 'important to me' not 'for me'. The modal 'don't' is fine; main issues are wording and there-be structure.

× It is quite for far from where I live, so many students have a long commute by bus which makes it difficult to conquer.

✓ It is quite far from where I live, so many students have a long commute by bus, which makes it difficult to manage.

Remove incorrect preposition 'for' after 'quite'. 'Makes it difficult to conquer' is incorrect collocation; use 'manage' or 'cope with'. Also add a comma before the relative clause. This fixes tense and structure issues.

× For this reason I would prefer to study at more convenient school.

✓ For this reason, I would prefer to study at a more convenient school.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'more convenient school'. Add a comma after the introductory phrase. Use 'a more convenient school' to refer to any school that is more convenient.

× So I let my school have a little laugh.

✓ So I will say something light about my school.

'I let my school have a little laugh' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intent is to introduce a light or humorous comment about the school. Rephrase to 'I will say something light about my school' for clarity and correct verb usage.

× It's about John took another tree and don't drop trees for another place at near at school.

✓ There was an incident where John took down a tree, and trees were not planted elsewhere near the school.

The original sentence has multiple preposition and verb-form errors ('about John took', 'don't drop trees for another place at near at school'). Use 'There was an incident where' to introduce the event. 'Took down a tree' is clearer than 'took another tree'. Use passive 'trees were not planted elsewhere near the school' to convey intended meaning. Fix prepositions 'near the school'.

× Yes, it's quite love, but it's really help to environment to be strong.

✓ Yes, people love it, and it really helps the environment stay healthy.

'Quite love' is incorrect adjective/adverb use; 'people love it' or 'it is lovely' works. 'It's really help to environment to be strong' mixes forms; use 'it really helps the environment stay healthy' or 'strengthen the environment'. Correct verb agreement and article 'the environment' are needed.

× Uh, I know someone crucial, uh, information about love.

✓ Uh, I know some crucial information about love.

'Someone crucial' is wrong—'some' should modify 'information', not 'someone'. Use 'some crucial information' to correctly quantify the noun.

× I right now I study love and love really has some really crucial and really interesting, uh, information about this.

✓ Right now I am studying about love, and the subject contains some really crucial and interesting information.

Use present continuous 'am studying' for an action happening now. Avoid repeating 'really' and the noun 'love' excessively. 'Has information about this' is awkward; 'the subject contains information' is clearer.

× I really like it how the subject has a really good information.

✓ I really like how the subject provides very good information.

'I really like it how...' is incorrect pronoun usage—omit 'it'. 'A really good information' is wrong because 'information' is uncountable; do not use 'a'. Use 'very good information' or 'a lot of useful information'.

× It's really important to be successful in your job.

✓ It's really important for being successful in your job.

Both 'to be successful in your job' and 'for being successful' can be acceptable; preferred correction keeps infinitive: 'It's really important to be successful in your job.' If keeping original, ensure preposition use is consistent. Here the original is acceptable, but slight rephrasing offered for formality.