Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地介绍身份和未来计划，避免重复。

예시: I am currently a third-year student at Shanghai Polytechnic University, and I plan to pursue postgraduate studies after completing my bachelor's degree.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，信息重复。建议直接说明学校和专业，避免多余词汇。

예시: I study International Business at Shanghai Polytechnic University.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不自然。建议用完整句子描述学校的优点，避免重复。

예시: Yes, it is a good place to study because it has convenient transportation and is close to my home, so I can easily go back.

제안: 回答不完整且语法混乱，表达不清。建议明确指出希望改进的具体方面，并用完整句子表达。

예시: I would like the university to improve the air conditioning in some study buildings because they are often turned off due to electrical issues, which makes studying uncomfortable.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不清。建议清晰表达未来计划和原因，避免重复。

예시: I hope to apply for postgraduate studies in England because I love different cultures and want to experience them firsthand.

× I'm planning for a planning for postgraduate study after my bachelor's degrees.

✓ I'm planning for postgraduate study after my bachelor's degree.

bachelor's degree 是单数形式，表示学士学位，不能用复数 degrees。这里应使用单数形式。

× I'm studying Shanghai as a junior student in Shanghai Polytechnic University and my major in International Business.

✓ I'm studying in Shanghai as a junior student at Shanghai Polytechnic University, and my major is International Business.

句子缺少介词 in 和 at，且缺少动词 is 来连接主语和表语，导致句子结构不完整。

× It has the convenient transportation and it's not far from my home.

✓ It has convenient transportation and it's not far from my home.

形容词 convenient 不需要加定冠词 the，the convenient transportation 是错误用法。

× I can easily back. I can easily back to my home uh.

✓ I can easily go back to my home.

句子缺少动词 go，导致句子不完整且重复。应使用完整的动词短语。

× While some study buildings have air conditioners, they are switched off or there's always switch off because the electrical variant is.

✓ While some study buildings have air conditioners, they are always switched off because of electrical issues.

句子中 there's always switch off 结构错误，应改为 they are always switched off。并且 electrical variant is 不完整，应改为 electrical issues。

× If I were old and I could unsafe.

✓ If I were old, it could be unsafe.

句子中 I could unsafe 结构错误，unsafe 是形容词，不能直接跟在情态动词后，应改为 it could be unsafe。

× Therefore I think the university.

✓ Therefore, I think the university should improve this situation.

句子缺少谓语动词，导致句子不完整。应补充完整表达。

× I hope I can smile apply for postgraduate study in England.

✓ I hope I can successfully apply for postgraduate study in England.

原句中 smile 应为 successfully，且 apply 前不应有 smile。

× I love a different cultures and want to want to have a have a look.

✓ I love different cultures and want to have a look.

different cultures 前不需要冠词 a，且 want to want to 和 have a have a 是重复，应去除多余部分。