Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免重复表达，如“choose this major”和“learned this major”意思重复。建议简洁明了地表达原因，并增加连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: I'm currently a student at Southwestern University, majoring in law and finance because I'm fascinated by how legal systems interact with financial institutions, and I hope to make a significant impact in this field.

제안: 回答较好，但开头重复了考官的问题，建议直接回答。可以使用更多连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: I study at Southwestern University in Chengdu, Sichuan province, China. It offers a quiet and calm atmosphere since it's located on the outskirts of the busy city center. Moreover, the dedicated teachers help me understand the subjects better.

제안: 回答未完成且表达不完整，缺少句子结尾。建议完整表达观点，避免句子中断，并使用更准确的词汇。

예시: Yes, I believe it is an excellent place to study because it offers abundant academic facilities. For example, the fully stocked library and fast internet allow me to access a wide range of resources efficiently.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构稍显混乱，且最后一句不完整。建议使用更准确的语法和连接词，使表达更清晰。

예시: Yes, I would like some changes because winters in Chengdu are cold and wet, which makes it hard to concentrate. Therefore, I hope the school can install a new central heating system to warm the classrooms.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，并正确使用时态和单复数。

예시: I'm currently a sophomore and plan to pursue further studies in England or Hong Kong, majoring in law or finance, because these places have excellent universities that offer courses in international law.

× I specialize in law and finance.

✓ I specialize in law and finance.

此句无单复数错误，保持原句。

× I choose this major because I'm fascinated by how law systems work and how it cooperates with the financial institutions.

✓ I choose this major because I'm fascinated by how legal systems work and how they cooperate with financial institutions.

“law systems”应为复数形式“legal systems”，且“it”指代复数应改为“they”，“the financial institutions”前的定冠词“the”不必要，去掉更自然。

× I learned this major because I want to have great influence.

✓ I chose this major because I want to have great influence.

“learned”表示过去学过，语境应为选择专业，故用过去式“chose”更合适。

× Where do you study? I study at Southwestern University in Chengdu, Sichuan province, China.

✓ I study at Southwestern University in Chengdu, Sichuan province, China.

重复了考官的问题，应只回答“我在哪里学习”，去掉重复句。

× It has a quiet and calm atmosphere to study because it's on the outskirts of the busy city center.

✓ It has a quiet and calm atmosphere for studying because it's on the outskirts of the busy city center.

“to study”应改为“for studying”，表示目的时用介词短语更合适。

× Besides, the teachers there are very dedicated and I can learn the topic better with their help.

✓ Besides, the teachers there are very dedicated and I can learn the subjects better with their help.

“the topic”应为复数“the subjects”，因为学习内容通常是多个学科。

× it has abundant academic facilities to assist me to learn the knowledge.

✓ it has abundant academic facilities to assist me in learning knowledge.

“learn the knowledge”表达不自然，改为“assist me in learning knowledge”更符合英语习惯。

× For example, it has a fully stocked library and very fast Internet which help me to link to a wide range of.

✓ For example, it has a fully stocked library and very fast Internet which help me access a wide range of resources.

“help me to link to a wide range of”不完整且用词不当，应改为“help me access a wide range of resources”。

× I hope there can be a new central heating systems to make the classroom.

✓ I hope there can be a new central heating system to make the classroom warmer.

“a new central heating systems”中“a”表示单数，后面应用单数“system”，且句子不完整，补充“warmer”。

× this place have great university which teach which which teach international law.

✓ this place has great universities which teach international law.

“this place have”主语单数应用“has”，“great university”应为复数“great universities”，“which teach”重复，应删去多余部分。