Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で内容も明確ですが、"agriculture science"は通常"agricultural science"と表現します。また、"because I'm interested in agriculture"の部分は少し冗長なので、より自然な表現に改善しましょう。

예시: I'm a fourth-year university student in Japan, specializing in agricultural science due to my strong interest in the field.

제안: 回答は簡潔ですが、"I often"の繰り返しが不自然です。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、より流暢にしましょう。

예시: I usually study in my university laboratory and also spend time studying in the library.

제안: "a so quiet place"は文法的に誤りです。"very quiet"や"such a quiet place"が適切です。また、"study efficiency"は不自然なので、"study efficiently"や"improve my concentration"などに直しましょう。

예시: Yes, it's a great place for me to study because it's very quiet, which helps me concentrate better.

제안: 文が断片的で意味が伝わりにくいです。理由を明確にし、一つの文で完結させるようにしましょう。

예시: No, I wouldn't like any changes because I prefer to concentrate in the same quiet place for a long time.

제안: 文法的な誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。"go master program"は"enroll in a master's program"に直し、"my knowledge spread"は"broaden my knowledge"などに修正しましょう。

예시: In the future, I would like to enroll in a master's program at my university to study my field more deeply and broaden my knowledge.

× Yes, it's a great place to study for me because it's a so quiet place.

✓ Yes, it's a great place to study for me because it's such a quiet place.

'a so quiet place' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'such a quiet place' to emphasize the quality of the place.

× And it helps me study efficiency.

✓ And it helps me study efficiently.

The word 'efficiency' is a noun, but here an adverb is needed to modify the verb 'study'. Therefore, 'efficiently' is correct.

× No, I don't like it because.

✓ No, I don't want to change it because I like it as it is.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. It should express the reason clearly and be a complete sentence.

× When I'm in concentration.

✓ When I'm concentrating.

'When I'm in concentration' is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'When I'm concentrating' using the present participle to express the action.

× For a long time I'd like to keep in same place.

✓ I'd like to stay in the same place for a long time.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing articles. The corrected sentence has proper word order and includes the definite article 'the' before 'same place'.

× In my future I'd like to go master program in my university and.

✓ In the future, I'd like to enter a master's program at my university and

The phrase 'go master program' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'enter a master's program'. Also, 'in my future' should be 'in the future'.

× I'll study in my my my field profoundly and my knowledge spread.

✓ I'll study my field deeply and expand my knowledge.

The sentence has repetition ('my my my'), awkward phrasing ('study in my field profoundly'), and incorrect verb usage ('my knowledge spread'). The correction uses natural expressions and correct verb forms.