Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct factual and grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (school name, grade, and one reason why it's notable). Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g., "flexibilities" is wrong).

예시: I'm a high school student in 11th grade at Hanoi - Amsterdam High School, which is one of Vietnam's most respected schools. It has rigorous academic programs and experienced teachers, and the students are generally very hardworking.

제안: Begin with a direct statement of location, correct the school name, and reduce fillers ("uh"). Use linking words to connect reasons (e.g., "because" → "and"). Be precise and natural: mention the city and two clear reasons (location and academics).

예시: I study at Hanoi - Amsterdam High School in Hanoi. I chose it mainly because it's close to my apartment and because it offers high academic standards and strong university preparation.

제안: Answer the question directly, then explain with one or two specific points using linking words (e.g., "however" or "but"). Correct awkward phrases ("restart it yourself") and grammar (subject-verb). Be balanced and concise.

예시: Yes, it's a good place to study because it encourages independent learning. However, teachers often move quickly through material, so students must review lessons on their own to fully understand them.

제안: State one clear change, give a specific reason, and avoid trailing or incomplete sentences. Replace fillers and fix grammar (e.g., "the amount of work that they" → "the amount of work they assign"). Suggest practical improvements (slower pace, more explanations).

예시: Yes. I would like teachers to slow down and give more step-by-step explanations, because I sometimes struggle to understand lessons and find it hard to keep up with the amount of homework they assign.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence about your plan, then add specific steps and goals. Correct grammar and redundancy ("gain achieve"). Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" to show purpose. Mention which certifications you aim for if possible.

예시: I plan to specialize in chemistry and learn French so I can study in France. Therefore, I'm preparing for language certifications like DELF and working to improve my academic grades to increase my chances of admission.

× I'm a high school student.

✓ I'm a high school student.

No grammar error; sentence is correct. (Provided for completeness.)

× I'm currently studying in the school.

✓ I'm currently studying at the school.

Use the preposition 'at' for being enrolled or attending a school; 'in the school' suggests being physically inside the building rather than enrolled as a student. Suggestion: Use 'at' for institutions you attend: 'studying at the school.'

× Hanoi Amsterdam in 11th grade is one of the most famous school in Vietnam, known for its high quality of flexibilities and teachers.

✓ I am in 11th grade at Hanoi Amsterdam, which is one of the most famous schools in Vietnam, known for its high-quality facilities and teachers.

Multiple issues: word order and sentence structure were incorrect; 'school' needs plural 'schools' because 'one of the' refers to a group; 'flexibilities' is incorrect word choice—likely 'facilities'; 'high quality' used as a compound adjective should be hyphenated before a noun ('high-quality'). Suggestion: Rearrange to 'I am in 11th grade at Hanoi Amsterdam, which is one of the most famous schools in Vietnam, known for its high-quality facilities and teachers.'

× The students there are really smart too.

✓ The students there are really smart, too.

Sentence is grammatically correct; added a comma before 'too' for clarity. No change in verb agreement needed. Suggestion: Use a comma before 'too' in spoken or written lists for readability.

× As I mentioned before, I study in the school Hannah Amsterdam, and I chose to study there because, uh, the school is near my apartment and because of the excellent academic standards.

✓ As I mentioned before, I study at Hanoi Amsterdam, and I chose to study there because the school is near my apartment and because of its excellent academic standards.

Use 'at' to indicate attending an institution. The school's name word order was wrong ('Hannah' is incorrect and should be 'Hanoi'); include 'its' to show possession for 'excellent academic standards.' Suggestion: 'I study at Hanoi Amsterdam' and use 'its' for possessive: 'because of its excellent academic standards.'

× In my opinion, yes it is, but it is a good place to learn how to study independently.

✓ In my opinion, yes, it is, and it is a good place to learn how to study independently.

Contradictory conjunction: original used 'but' which suggests a contrast but the meaning is positive. Use 'and' to connect two positive statements. Also add comma after 'yes' for clarity. Suggestion: Choose conjunctions that match intended meaning: 'and' for addition, 'but' for contrast.

× The teacher will not support you a lot, they will teach really fast and you need to restart it yourself to gain a better understanding of it.

✓ The teachers will not support you much; they teach very fast and you need to review the material yourself to gain a better understanding.

Several issues: 'The teacher' should be plural 'The teachers' if referring to staff in general; 'a lot' is less natural after 'support you' — use 'much' in negative sentences; 'restart it yourself' is incorrect collocation — use 'review the material yourself.' Also 'teach really fast' better as 'teach very fast' or 'teach at a fast pace.' Suggestion: Use plural when speaking about teachers in general, use 'much' in negatives, and use 'review' or 'study again' instead of 'restart.'

× Yes, I would really like to change the way teachers convey their knowledge to students.

✓ Yes, I would really like to change the way teachers convey knowledge to students.

No major grammatical error; removing 'their' is optional but sounds more natural here. If keeping 'their', sentence remains acceptable. Suggestion: Both versions are fine; 'teachers convey knowledge to students' is slightly more concise.

× Uh, I struggle with understanding the lessons and I find it hard to keep up with the amount of work that they.

✓ I struggle with understanding the lessons, and I find it hard to keep up with the amount of work that they assign.

Sentence is incomplete: 'that they' needs a verb (e.g., 'assign'). Add comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. Suggestion: Complete relative clauses by providing a verb: 'the amount of work that they assign.'

× Well, I'm studying, specialize in chemistry, I'm learning French so that I can study abroad in France in the future.

✓ Well, I'm specializing in chemistry, and I'm learning French so that I can study abroad in France in the future.

Verb form and sentence structure issues: 'studying, specialize' is incorrect; use 'I'm specializing' or 'I study' consistently. Add conjunction 'and' to join clauses. Suggestion: Use continuous form for ongoing study focus: 'I'm specializing in chemistry.'

× So that's my goal and I'm trying really hard to gain achieve some certification to improve my chance of getting accepted.

✓ So that's my goal, and I'm trying really hard to achieve some certifications to improve my chances of being accepted.

Several issues: 'gain achieve' contains two verbs incorrectly combined — choose one ('achieve' or 'gain'); 'some certification' is better as 'some certifications' (plural) or 'a certification' depending on meaning; 'my chance' should be plural 'my chances' and 'getting accepted' better as 'being accepted.' Suggestion: Use one verb ('achieve'), match singular/plural with intent ('a certification' vs 'certifications'), and use 'chances' for general probability: 'improve my chances of being accepted.'