Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子中有多处语法和用词错误，表达不够自然且过长。建议用一句主题句直接回答，然后提供一到两句简洁的补充细节，注意冠词和词序（例如：‘I am a student at your university, majoring in Media and Communication.’）。避免重复，最多不超过五个句子。

예시: I am a student at this university, majoring in Media and Communication. I attend lectures and work on coursework and independent projects most days. I really enjoy it because the courses are interesting and the university offers many extracurricular activities.

제안: 回答较自然但句子稍长且有若干用词不当（例如 ‘most coffees’ 应为 ‘most cafés’）。建议先用一句直接回答，再用一两句具体理由，用连接词使逻辑更清晰。注意冠词和复数形式。

예시: I usually study in cafés with my friends. I like the relaxed atmosphere and the light background music, and I can grab a snack or coffee while I work. Also, most cafés offer free Wi‑Fi, which makes online research convenient.

제안: 内容有说服力但语言表达不够简洁，存在语法错误（例如 ‘compared to studying in the library’；‘helps me understand points I find confusing’；‘the free Wi‑Fi in cafés helps’）。建议用清晰的主题句并用两三个支持点说明，每点用连词连接。

예시: Yes, I think cafés are a good place to study because they are less formal than libraries and make it easy to discuss problems with classmates. This often helps me understand concepts I find confusing. In addition, free Wi‑Fi in cafés saves my mobile data.

제안: 回答有意思但多处词汇和语法错误导致意思不清（例如 ‘inform some roses’ 无意义，‘time limited for non paying visitors’ 用词错误）。建议明确指出问题并提出具体可行的改进措施，句子要简短且语法正确。

예시: Yes, some customers play video games loudly, which makes it hard to concentrate. I would suggest the café introduce designated quiet hours for people studying and politely ask non‑paying visitors to limit noisy activities during those times.

제안: 回答清晰但有小错误和冗余（例如多余的冠词 ‘the a masters degree’，‘newest knowledge’ 可改为 ‘up‑to‑date knowledge’）。建议用一句主题句加一两句具体原因，使用更地道的词汇并保持简洁。

예시: I plan to pursue a master's degree in Media and Communication to gain up‑to‑date knowledge and practical skills. I want to study abroad because it would broaden my horizons and improve my career prospects.

× I am outside your university student majored in Media and Communication.

✓ I am an undergraduate student at your university, majoring in Media and Communication.

原句缺少冠词并且表达不自然。英文中表示身份时通常用不定冠词 a/an，且表示专业时常用“majoring in”或“who major(s) in”。建议使用“I am an undergraduate student at your university, majoring in...”。

× I spend most of my time having lectures, doing courseworks and working on independent study projects, and I really enjoy my time at university because the courses are interesting and there are a lot of activities.

✓ I spend most of my time attending lectures, doing coursework and working on independent study projects, and I really enjoy my time at university because the courses are interesting and there are a lot of activities.

“having lectures”用法不自然，通常用“attend lectures”。“courseworks”为不可数名词，应该用“coursework”。保持动词形式一致并使用常见搭配更地道。

× Honestly, I often study in coffee shops with my friends because I really enjoy the relaxing and the light background music, and I can get some snacks or a cup of coffee during a study.

✓ Honestly, I often study in coffee shops with my friends because I really enjoy the relaxing, light background music, and I can get some snacks or a cup of coffee while studying.

“the relaxing and the light background music”中定冠词多余且形容词顺序与连词使用不当；“during a study”不自然，表示在学习时应使用“while studying”。建议去掉不必要的冠词并用现在分词短语表示同时发生的动作。

× Additionally, most coffees provide free Wi-Fi, so it is convenient for me to research online.

✓ Additionally, most cafés provide free Wi‑Fi, so it is convenient for me to do research online.

“coffees”错误地把咖啡馆称为coffee，应使用“cafés”或“coffee shops”。“research”作为动词或不可数名词时常与“do”连用表示做研究，故改为“do research”。

× Definitely, compared to study in the library, study in coffee shop is less formal, so when I have some questions, I can easily discuss them with my classmates, which often help me understand the point I find the confusion.

✓ Definitely, compared to studying in the library, studying in a coffee shop is less formal, so when I have some questions, I can easily discuss them with my classmates, which often helps me understand the points I find confusing.

“compared to study”应为动名词“studying”。“study in coffee shop”需加冠词“a coffee shop”。“which often help”主语为单数“which”或指代整个从句，应使用第三人称单数“helps”。“the point I find the confusion”表达不当，改为“the points I find confusing”。

× Also, the free Wi-Fi in Cafe help me save on mobile data.

✓ Also, the free Wi‑Fi in the café helps me save on mobile data.

“Cafe”需用定冠词或正确小写并带重音符号（可作café或 cafe），且主语“Wi‑Fi”单数动词用“helps”。注意主谓一致和冠词使用。

× Yes, here people who come to the cafe just to hang out and play video games loudly which makes it hard to study.

✓ Yes, there are people who come to the café just to hang out and play video games loudly, which makes it hard to study.

原句缺少主语补充“there are people”，且需要逗号分隔定语从句与结果从句。使用“there are”更自然地引入存在的人群。

× Therefore I think the cafe could inform some roses.

✓ Therefore I think the café could introduce some rules.

“inform some roses”明显是拼写或词汇错误，应为“rules”（规则）。同时“café”拼写统一。

× For example, a time limited for non paying visitors are a quiet zone for study or working people.

✓ For example, a time-limited quiet zone for non-paying visitors could be set up for students and people who are working.

原句语序和冠词使用混乱。“a time limited for non paying visitors are a quiet zone”应改为名词短语“a time-limited quiet zone for non-paying visitors”。注意复数及主谓一致，使用“could be set up”更符合建议语气。

× In the future, I plan to pursue the a masters degree in my major to learn the newest knowledge and some practical skills.

✓ In the future, I plan to pursue a master's degree in my major to learn the newest knowledge and some practical skills.

原句中“the a masters degree”同时出现了定冠词和不定冠词且“masters”应为所有格“master's”。应使用“a master's degree”。

× So I want to study abroad because it will broaden my horizon and increase my career opportunities.

✓ So I want to study abroad because it will broaden my horizons and increase my career opportunities.

“broaden my horizon”通常用复数形式“broaden my horizons”。这是固定搭配，使用复数更地道。