Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid confusing phrasing and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly to connect ideas. Also keep to natural sentence structure and simpler vocabulary if unsure.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I was very small for my age, so it was hard to find a bike that fit me. As a result, I mostly walked or used public transport to get around.

제안: Answer directly, then provide a clear reason with a specific detail. Reduce fillers ("umm") and avoid repetition. Use a linking word like "because" or "so" to connect your opinion and reason. You can add a brief example or contrast to strengthen your response.

예시: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because the climate is extremely hot for much of the year. For example, many people prefer cars or buses to avoid cycling in high temperatures.

× As on I wasn't always child growing up, so finding a bike that I could actually fit in was an extreme job that I wasn't able to achieve.

✓ As I was not a small child growing up, finding a bike that I could actually fit on was very difficult, so I did not have one.

The original sentence has several structure problems: unnecessary word 'on', missing article before 'child', incorrect adjective order, and awkward phrasing 'extreme job that I wasn't able to achieve'. Use 'As I was not a small child' or 'As I wasn't small as a child' and 'fit on' for bicycles. Replace 'extreme job that I wasn't able to achieve' with 'very difficult' and simplify the clause order. Suggestion: simplify complex clauses, use correct articles, and choose natural collocations (fit on a bike, very difficult).

× So no, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ So no, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. It correctly uses past simple tense to describe a past state. Keep the structure for clarity.

× No, because umm, by by.

✓ No, because, um,

The fragment 'by by' is a filler error and not a valid conjunction. Use a single filler 'um' or remove it. Also include commas for pauses. Suggestion: avoid repeating filler words and remove unclear fragments.

× Cycling and the weather outside is very hard and it's unimaginably hot outside.

✓ Cycling is difficult because the weather is very hot.

Original has redundancy ('outside' twice) and subject-verb agreement issue if 'Cycling and the weather' treated as compound subject would require plural verb. Better to state a single clear cause-effect: 'Cycling is difficult because the weather is very hot.' This corrects agreement and removes repetition. Suggestion: make the subject clear and avoid repeating the same word.

× So no, bicycling is not very common in my country.

✓ So no, bicycling is not very common in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately uses present simple to state a general fact. No change needed.