Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one short supporting reason with a specific detail. Use linking words (e.g. because, so) and correct grammar (was/were, allowed). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents didn't allow me to ride on the road for safety reasons. As a result, I mostly walked or used public transport to go to school.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "after analyzing" and redundant words. Use accurate comparisons and clearer vocabulary (e.g. "more popular than cars or buses"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheaper and easier to park than cars. For example, many people use motorcycles or bicycles to commute short distances, especially in crowded city centers.

× No, I do not have a bike when I was I was a child because my parents don't allow allowed me to ride a ride bikes.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my parents did not allow me to ride bikes.

The sentence mixes present and past tense ('do not have' with 'when I was a child') and contains repeated words and incorrect verb forms. Use past simple for past situations: 'did not have' and 'did not allow'. Remove duplicate words ('I was I was', 'ride a ride') and use the plural noun 'bikes' after 'ride' without the article. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistently for all verbs describing childhood events.

× After analyzing in this time, in my perspective, bikes are more popular in my country than a public transportation and or cars and vehicles because everyone loves bikes and it's easy to everyone.

✓ From my perspective, bikes are more popular in my country than public transportation or cars and other vehicles because everyone likes bikes and they are easy to use.

The phrase 'more popular than a public transportation' incorrectly uses the article 'a' with an uncountable noun; use 'public transportation' without an article. 'and or cars and vehicles' is redundant and unclear; choose 'or cars and other vehicles'. 'Everyone loves bikes and it's easy to everyone' has problems: 'likes' is a better general verb, and 'it's easy to everyone' is incorrect phrasing—use 'they are easy to use' or 'they are convenient for everyone'. Also simplify introductory phrase to 'From my perspective' rather than 'After analyzing in this time'.

× After analyzing in this time, in my perspective, bikes are more popular in my country than a public transportation and or cars and vehicles because everyone loves bikes and it's easy to everyone.

✓ From my perspective, bikes are more popular in my country than public transportation or cars and other vehicles because everyone likes bikes and they are easy to use.

The original uses 'it's' referring to 'bikes' (plural), which is a pronoun-number mismatch. Replace 'it's' with 'they are' to match the plural noun 'bikes'. Also change 'everyone loves' to 'everyone likes' if you prefer more neutral phrasing. Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.