Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one clear supporting detail and a brief result. Avoid repetition and unnecessary phrases. Use linking words (e.g., "but", "so", "because") to connect ideas and keep the answer within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I never asked my parents for one. My brother had a bike and tried to teach me once, but I fell and never learned to ride.

제안: Provide a clear, well-structured answer: start with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons or examples. Remove hesitations and filler words. Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary (e.g., "popular", "in the past", "nowadays", "recreation"), and limit to 2–4 sentences for coherence.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. In the past, many families used bikes for transport and children’s play, and nowadays people still ride bikes for exercise and short trips in cities.

× No, I didn't have a bike as I didn't ask my parents to buy a bike for me.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because I didn't ask my parents to buy one for me.

Use of 'as' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer for cause; more importantly, repetition 'a bike' is unnecessary; use pronoun 'one' to avoid repetition. Also 'as' can be ambiguous in spoken English; prefer 'because'. Suggestion: Replace 'as' with 'because' and use 'one' instead of repeating the noun.

× However, my brother owned it and once he wanted to teach me how to ride a bike but I fell and couldn't ride it.

✓ However, my brother owned one, and once he wanted to teach me to ride it, but I fell and couldn't continue.

Using 'it' twice is unclear: first 'it' refers to 'a bike' — better use 'one' then 'it' for clarity. Also 'teach me how to ride a bike' is wordy; 'teach me to ride it' is more natural. 'Couldn't ride it' is ambiguous about when; 'couldn't continue' clarifies that after the fall the student could not keep riding. Suggestion: Use 'one' to replace repeated noun and streamline the verb phrase.

× Bike was always popular in our country, especially in Soviet Union.

✓ Bicycles have always been popular in our country, especially during the Soviet Union era.

'Bike was always popular' mixes singular 'bike' with a general statement; use plural 'bicycles' and present perfect 'have always been' to indicate a continuing situation. Also specify 'Soviet Union' with preposition 'during' and add 'era' for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural and present perfect when discussing long-term trends.

× Uh, people both uh, uh, bikes uh, if before entertaining their children in in modern days.

✓ People used to use bikes to entertain their children in the past.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and contains filler sounds; structure unclear. 'Both' and 'if before' are incorrect here. Use 'used to' to talk about habitual past actions and 'in the past' instead of 'in modern days' which contradicts 'before'. Suggestion: Remove fillers and rewrite concisely: 'People used to use bikes to entertain their children in the past.'

× On modern days, it is also actual and people prefer to ride bikes in on our streets.

✓ Nowadays it is still common, and people prefer to ride bikes on our streets.

'On modern days' is incorrect; use 'Nowadays'. 'It is also actual' is wrong collocation; use 'still common' or 'still popular'. Preposition 'in on our streets' contains both 'in' and 'on' — use 'on our streets'. Suggestion: Use 'Nowadays' and 'still common' and correct preposition 'on'.