Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and direct, but it can be improved by making sentences more natural, correcting minor grammar, and adding a concise linking phrase to connect ideas. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “when I was a child” repeated) and keep within 3–4 sentences. Mention a brief specific detail (age or typical trips) to enrich content.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. I grew up in a small village, so I usually walked to school or to my friends’ houses. As a result, I became used to walking long distances most days.

제안: Your response answers the question but needs clearer organization and more accurate vocabulary. Remove filler words, use linking words (e.g., ‘also’ and ‘for example’), correct collocations (use ‘recreational purposes’, ‘mountainous areas’), and provide one specific example or statistic if possible. Keep to 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many children ride them to visit friends or play in their neighborhoods, and many adults cycle for exercise or leisure. For example, people often cycle on weekends in mountainous or rural areas where trails are common.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence uses 'did not' which is grammatically correct but wordy in spoken English. Replace 'did not' with the contraction 'didn't' to sound natural in conversation. No tense change is needed.

× So I always walk when I want to get around.

✓ So I always walked when I wanted to get around.

The context is about childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Always walk' and 'want' are present tense; change to 'walked' and 'wanted' to maintain consistent past-time reference.

× Yes, I believe bikes are popular among children for them to get around with friends or to go around, uh, in their neighborhood, and also among adults.

✓ Yes, I believe bikes are popular among children to get around with friends or to ride around in their neighborhood, and they are also popular among adults.

The phrase 'for them to get around' is awkward and uses an unnecessary pronoun. Replace with an infinitive phrase 'to get around' and rephrase the clause about adults for clarity. Also use 'ride around' rather than repeating 'go around' for natural collocation.

× They use it for sports or for recreational purpose, as Indonesians are full of terrain and Mountaineers.

✓ They use them for sports or recreational purposes, as Indonesia has varied terrain and many mountaineers.

Several issues: 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'bikes' (pronoun agreement); 'recreational purpose' should be plural 'recreational purposes' to sound natural; 'as Indonesians are full of terrain and Mountaineers' is ungrammatical and awkward. Replace with 'Indonesia has varied terrain and many mountaineers' to convey intended meaning. Also maintain plurality and correct noun forms.