Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain the reason using correct tense and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "due to") once, and combine ideas into one or two sentences. Also correct verb forms ("they did not buy me" or "my parents didn’t buy me one").

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my parents were strict after my brothers had an accident. As a result, they felt it was unsafe and didn’t allow me to ride.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and add a specific detail or short reason with correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases like "so much popular"; use "very popular" or "widely used." Use a linking word to connect the general statement to the supporting detail (e.g., "because" or "for example").

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Pakistan because they are affordable and convenient for city traffic. For example, many people in Lahore use motorbikes to commute to work and run errands.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my father was very strict about not having a bike.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my father was very strict about letting me have one.

The original sentence is mostly correct in past tense, but the phrase 'strict about not having a bike' is awkward and unclear: it implies the child was not allowed, but uses passive construction. Replacing it with 'strict about letting me have one' clarifies that the father forbade the child from having a bike. Use past tense 'did not have' consistently. Suggestion: keep simple past and use clear verb phrases (e.g., 'did not allow me to have a bike').

× Because there are certain things that happened in the past with my brothers that they had an accident and that was very weird.

✓ There were certain incidents in the past when my brothers had accidents, and that was very upsetting.

Beginning a sentence with 'Because' followed by another clause creates a fragment or awkward structure. Also 'are' (present) conflicts with 'happened' (past). Change to past tense 'There were' and a clear noun 'incidents' to match 'happened'. 'Weird' is informal and vague; 'upsetting' or 'disturbing' better expresses why the speaker avoided bikes. Suggestion: use a complete past-tense sentence and precise vocabulary.

× That's why they did not bought me a bike.

✓ That's why they did not buy me a bike.

After 'did' the base form of the verb should be used; 'bought' is the past form and is incorrect here. Use 'did not buy' for negative simple past. Suggestion: remember 'did' or 'did not' + base verb (buy).

× Absolutely. The bikes are so much popular in my country and majority of the people that lives in Lahore in Pakistan have bikes in their homes.

✓ Absolutely. Bikes are very popular in my country, and the majority of people who live in Lahore, Pakistan, have bikes.

Use no definite article before general plural 'bikes' when speaking generically. Phrase 'so much popular' is incorrect; use 'very popular'. 'Majority of the people that lives' has two issues: 'majority' usually takes 'the majority of people' and verb agreement: 'people who live' (not 'lives'). Also 'in Lahore in Pakistan' is redundant; 'Lahore, Pakistan' is clearer. Suggestions: use 'very popular', omit 'the' for general plurals, use 'the majority of people who live' and ensure subject-verb agreement.