Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses and articles, reduce repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, 'and' or 'so') only where needed. Aim for 3–4 clear sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had two bikes: a pink one and a blue one. I used to ride to school every day, which helped me stay active and saved bus fare. Because the route was short and safe, cycling was very convenient for me.

제안: Avoid vague phrasing and filler words. Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and a brief example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to connect ideas, and choose natural vocabulary (e.g., 'electric scooters' rather than 'EV scooters'). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I don't think so. Bicycles are less common now because many people prefer electric scooters and cars for convenience. For example, in my city more families buy electric scooters since they are faster and require less effort than cycling.

× I have a two bikes, one was a one was a pink colour and one one was in blue colour.

✓ I had two bikes; one was pink and the other was blue.

Original uses plural/singular incorrectly ('I have a two bikes' mixes present tense and wrong article/number). Also repeats words and uses awkward 'colour' phrases. Use past tense 'had' to match 'Did you have' question, use 'two bikes' without 'a', and contrast with 'one... the other...' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'had' for past ownership and write 'two bikes' (no 'a') and 'one was pink and the other was blue'.

× I was used to, uh, I was used to go school with my bike and.

✓ I was used to going to school by bike.

The phrase 'used to' followed by 'to' requires a gerund when expressing accustomed habits: 'used to going'. Also use 'to school' and 'by bike' for natural preposition. Remove filler 'uh' and trailing 'and'. Suggestion: Say 'I was used to going to school by bike' or 'I used to go to school by bike'.

× Not at all. Nowadays there are more vehicle upgraded, uh, as like the EV scooters, EV cars, so people are diverted on that side and uh, they are not using cycle in my country.

✓ Not at all. Nowadays there are more advanced vehicles, such as EV scooters and electric cars, so people have shifted to them and they do not use bicycles much in my country.

Multiple problems: 'there are more vehicle upgraded' is ungrammatical and mixes tense/word forms; use 'more advanced vehicles' or 'upgraded vehicles'. 'as like' is incorrect; use 'such as' or 'like'. 'people are diverted on that side' is wrong; use 'people have shifted to them' or 'people prefer them'. 'they are not using cycle' needs plural 'bicycles' or 'using bicycles' and correct aspect 'do not use'. Maintain present simple for general statements. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use 'such as' for examples, 'have shifted to' or 'prefer', and 'bicycles' rather than 'cycle'.