Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, coherence, and completeness. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., 'No, I didn't have a bike as a child.'), use past tense consistently (had, asked, took, went), and finish the story with a complete sentence. Reduce hesitations and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific supporting details (age, what happened in the accident, consequence) and use linking words (however, so, because) to make the narrative logical and within 3–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, although I really wanted one and often asked my parents. My older sister owned a bike, so when I was about nine I secretly took it to ride around the neighborhood. However, I fell off near a corner and scraped my knee, which frightened my parents and made them more cautious about letting me ride alone.

제안: Make the answer more direct and organized. Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No/It depends), then explain with specific examples and linking words (for example, however, because). Use precise vocabulary (commuters, students, professionals) and complete sentences. State reasons and contrasts briefly—avoid trailing off. Keep it to 2–3 sentences with concrete details such as why students use bikes and why adults may not.

예시: It depends, but overall bikes are quite popular among students in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips to school or university. However, many adults prefer motorbikes or cars since they commute farther for work and need to carry equipment, so biking is less common among professionals.

× Well when I was a child I never had a bike but I really wanted to have it so I always ask my parents to get me one.

✓ Well, when I was a child I never had a bike but I really wanted one so I always asked my parents to get me one.

The sentence mixes past time reference ('when I was a child', 'never had', 'wanted') with a present-tense verb 'ask'. Use past tense 'asked' to maintain consistent past narration. Also replace 'have it' with 'one' for natural reference to 'a bike'. Suggestion: Keep verbs consistent in past narrative; change 'ask' to 'asked' and 'have it' to 'one'.

× But unlike me, my older sister had one bike.

✓ But unlike me, my older sister had a bike.

Using 'one bike' is grammatically possible but unnatural; native usage prefers 'a bike'. This is a singular/plural and article choice issue. Suggestion: Use 'a bike' rather than 'one bike' for natural speech.

× So one time I took it and go on the walk.

✓ So one time I took it and went for a walk.

The sentence combines past 'took' with present 'go'. Use the past form 'went' for correct tense agreement. Also idiomatic English uses 'went for a walk' rather than 'go on the walk'. Suggestion: Match verb tenses and use idiomatic phrase 'went for a walk'.

× But uh in the walk there was an accident and I.

✓ But while we were walking there was an accident and I got injured.

The original sentence is incomplete ('and I.') and uses awkward phrasing 'in the walk'. Correct structure: use a complete clause and appropriate verb; 'while we were walking' fits the context and 'got injured' completes the thought. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments and complete the idea with a main verb and object.

× Well, that depends because it can be popular or for some age of people in my country, like for the students, it's very popular.

✓ Well, that depends because it can be popular for some age groups in my country; for example, students, for whom it's very popular.

The phrase 'for some age of people' is ungrammatical. Use 'age groups' or 'certain ages'. Also maintain present simple when discussing general facts: 'it can be popular' is acceptable but clarify with 'for some age groups' and restructure for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'age groups' and more natural clause ordering.

× They're running off the time to get to the university or the schools, but unlike them, the adults have a course and uh, most of their jobs can be very uh.

✓ They hurry to get to university or school, but unlike them, adults have commutes and many of their jobs can be very demanding.

'They're running off the time' is not idiomatic; use 'hurry' or 'rush' instead. 'To get to the university or the schools' should be 'to university or school' for generality. 'Have a course' is incorrect for adults commuting; use 'have commutes'. Also complete the unfinished thought 'can be very ...' with an adjective such as 'demanding'. Suggestion: Use idiomatic verbs ('hurry', 'rush'), correct noun forms ('commute'), and finish the sentence with appropriate adjectives.