Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but has many problems: incorrect words, unclear references, grammar mistakes, repetitions and disjointed ideas. To improve, give a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep sentences concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Focus on correct vocabulary (bike, bicycle, my own, borrowed) and correct tense and word order. Example points to correct: use “bicycle” or “bike,” say “it wasn’t my own; I borrowed my father’s bike,” avoid filler sounds and repeated words, and connect ideas with words like “because,” “so,” or “when.”

예시: Yes. I used to ride my father’s bicycle when I was a child because he was a civil servant who received the bike from his office. I often rode it in the afternoons to visit friends and run small errands, so I became quite confident riding in traffic.

제안: The answer contains many unclear phrases and repetition, making it hard to follow. Start with a clear direct statement (Yes/No and reason), then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words (for example, “because,” “for,” “so”). Use accurate vocabulary: “popular,” “common,” “transport,” “livelihood,” “commute.” Avoid repeating words and vague phrases like “next two years later.” Provide concrete examples (students, delivery drivers, rural areas).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for daily travel. For many people, especially students and delivery workers, bicycles and motorbikes are their main means of transport and a source of income in small towns and rural areas.

× Well, yes, I had a bag not of my own.

✓ Well, yes, I had a bike that was not my own.

The original sentence likely used 'bag' by mistake; context refers to a bike. This is mainly lexical, but keep past tense 'had' to match the past-time question. Replace the incorrect noun and use a relative clause 'that was not my own' for clarity.

× My father had a 1 and I used to ride it regularly in the afternoon.

✓ My father had one, and I used to ride it regularly in the afternoons.

The original '1' is incorrect; use 'one' to refer to the bike. Add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Use plural 'afternoons' for habitual past actions. Maintain past habitual 'used to'.

× My father was issued with a bike from the government as he was a civil servant he while he came back from home from office.

✓ My father was issued a bike by the government because he was a civil servant, and he brought it home from the office.

The original has word order problems and extra words. Use passive 'was issued a bike by the government' (omit 'with'), and 'because' to express reason. Use 'brought it home from the office' to indicate he brought the bike home; avoid redundant 'came back from home from office'.

× And and the dog was left with.

✓ The dog was left with it.

The original repeats 'and' and has incomplete structure 'was left with.' Specify the object 'it' (the bike) to complete the sentence. Alternatively, if meaning is different, clarify what or whom the dog was left with.

× Yes, rights are not only not only just popular, but also the next two years later by people of this country.

✓ Yes, bikes are not only popular now, but they will be even more popular over the next two years among people in this country.

'Rights' is a miswording; context requires 'bikes.' The original repeats 'not only' and misorders time phrase. Use present 'are' for current popularity and 'will be' for future increase. Place 'over the next two years' correctly and use 'among people in this country.'

× And it is not just for amusement or recreation, it is for a livelihood.

✓ It is not just for amusement or recreation; it is also a means of livelihood.

The sentence is understandable but awkward. Use 'means of livelihood' or 'a source of livelihood' to express that bikes are used for earning a living. Replace the comma with a semicolon or period to join two independent clauses correctly, and add 'also' for parallelism.

× It is a person of the livelihood of this of the people of the central.

✓ It is an important part of the livelihood of many people in the central region.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Recast to 'an important part of the livelihood of many people' and specify location 'central region' for clarity. Use 'of many people' rather than 'this of the people'.