Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more coherent and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Also correct verb forms and vocabulary choice (e.g., "bike" not "mic"). Aim for 2–4 sentences, for example: state who gave it, describe appearance, and explain why it was special.

예시: Yes, I did. My father gave me a small pink bicycle when I was about seven, and I had wanted one for years. Because it was bright pink and had a little bell, it stood out from other bikes, so I felt very proud riding it around the neighborhood.

제안: Make your argument clearer and use correct vocabulary. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Replace unclear words ("most legally", "bags") with accurate terms ("mainly", "bicycles"). Keep answers concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer to drive cars or take trains and buses for convenience. For example, in cities there are few bike lanes, so cycling is uncommon for daily commuting.

× My father gave me it when I was a child.

✓ My father gave it to me when I was a child.

The pronoun order is incorrect in English. Use object pronouns after the preposition to (give something to someone) or place the indirect object before the direct object without to (My father gave me the bike). Here 'gave it to me' is correct. Suggestion: say 'My father gave it to me' or 'My father gave me a bike.'

× It it was the person I have wanted for years.

✓ It was the one I had wanted for years.

This sentence has redundancy ('It it') and wrong noun choice ('person') and incorrect tense. 'Wanted for years' refers to a desire prior to the past reference, so past perfect 'had wanted' is appropriate. 'One' or 'bike' is the correct noun, not 'person.' Suggestion: remove duplication, use correct noun and past perfect: 'It was the one I had wanted for years.'

× It was pink and it's a tiny little mic, right?

✓ It was pink and it was a tiny little bike, right?

The word 'mic' is incorrect in context; likely intended 'bike.' Also tense should remain past ('was') to match earlier past-tense narration. 'Tiny little' is colloquial but acceptable; keep consistent past tense. Suggestion: replace 'mic' with 'bike' and use 'was' instead of 'it's.'

× It's unique to me because I.

✓ It was unique to me because I loved it.

The sentence is incomplete ('I.'), and tense inconsistency exists: previous statements are past, so use past 'was.' Also need a verb to complete the clause; 'loved it' explains why it was unique. Suggestion: complete the sentence with a past verb: 'It was unique to me because I loved it.'

× I don't think so because most people use their cars to travel.

✓ I don't think so because most people use their cars to travel.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches present-tense opinion; no change needed. (No action required.)

× Most legally they use trains or buses, but I have never seen most people using their bags.

✓ Usually they use trains or buses, but I have never seen most people using bikes.

'Most legally' is incorrect adverbial use; likely intended 'usually' or 'mostly.' 'Using their bags' is wrong noun—should be 'bikes.' Also keep present perfect observation 'I have never seen' is fine. Suggestion: replace 'Most legally' with 'Usually' and 'bags' with 'bikes' to convey intended meaning.