Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep your reply directly relevant and use a clear simple sentence as a topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Focus on correct word order and verb forms. For example, start with “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.” Then add details such as who gave it to you, what it looked like, and a short memory. Use linking words like “and” or “because” to connect ideas and avoid unnecessary hesitations or repeated words.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a small red bike when I was seven, and I rode it every day after school. It had training wheels at first, but I learned to ride without them within a few months.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and contradictory words used incorrectly. Use linking words like “because”, “however” or “for example” properly. For instance say “Yes, bikes are popular because…” or “Bikes have become more popular recently because…”. Give a concrete recent example or statistic if possible.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances and there are now more cycle lanes in cities. For example, last summer the local council opened a new bike path, and I noticed many more people cycling to work.

× You say had a bug and when I was a child and it bought for me, my parents and I it was. Small bike for.

✓ When I was a child, I had a small bike that my parents bought for me.

The original sentence has severe sentence structure and word order problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). The speaker mixes subject, object, and verb order and inserts extra words like 'you say' and 'bug' (likely 'bike'). Correct sentence places time clause first, subject 'I', verb 'had', and then a relative clause 'that my parents bought for me' to show who bought the bike. To improve: identify the main clause (I had a small bike), use a clear time expression at the start ('When I was a child'), and attach ownership/agent information with a relative clause or prepositional phrase ('my parents bought it for me'). Use simple, direct word order: Subject + Verb + Object, and place modifiers (time, size) appropriately.

× I think yes, uh, now, uh, about, uh, are popular in my country, but however, in last month, uh, last summer, it's uh, was, it wasn't purple.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country now, but last summer they were not as popular.

The original sentence shows incorrect tense usage and confused auxiliary forms (Grammar Problem Type ID 6: Present tense issue, and also Past tense mixing). The speaker tries to contrast present popularity with the past but mixes 'are', 'was', and 'it's' incorrectly and uses filler words. The correction uses present simple 'are popular' to describe the current state and past simple 'were not' to describe last summer. To improve: decide the time frame for each clause and use the appropriate simple tense (present simple for general/current facts, past simple for specific past times), remove filler words, and ensure subject-verb agreement ('bikes' -> 'they').