Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear, contains many grammatical errors, and includes irrelevant words (bag, practice writing) that confuse meaning. Keep answers direct: start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense for childhood, add one or two specific supporting details, and avoid hesitation fillers. Use linking words if you add details (e.g., “because,” “so,” “when”).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven, and my mother often rode alongside me to help me learn. Because it was lightweight and easy to handle, I used it to visit my friends and go to the nearby park.

제안: Your answer repeats words and has many word-choice errors (shirt bags?) and awkward grammar. Answer directly, state your opinion, then give specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “however”) and correct collocations (e.g., “popular,” “short distances,” “important form of transport”). Limit to 2–4 clear sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short distances. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to buy groceries in crowded city areas, since they are faster than walking and easier to park than cars.

× Yes, I do have a bag when I was a child and I remember that my mom, umm was a company with me and uh and helped me to practice writing.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I remember that my mom accompanied me and helped me practice riding.

The student used present tense 'do have' with a past time marker 'when I was a child' so tense is incorrect (Present vs Past) which maps to present/past tense issues and pronoun/confusing word choice. Also 'a bag' is incorrect noun (should be 'a bike'), and 'was a company with me' is incorrect idiom and pronoun use; 'accompanied me' or 'was with me' is correct. Suggestion: match tense to time expression (use past 'had'), use correct nouns ('bike'), and use 'accompany' or 'be with' instead of 'company'. Use 'practice riding' not 'practice writing'. Keep clauses parallel and omit filler words.

× Back and backs are good in transportation and also a good.

✓ Bicycles are good for transportation and are also convenient.

'Back and backs' is incorrect word choice and likely a mistaken plural; this is a lexical error and improper adjective/adverb usage. 'good in transportation' is wrong preposition and structure: use 'good for transportation'. Ending 'and also a good' is incomplete; use 'also convenient' or 'also useful'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'bicycles', use preposition 'for', and complete the adjective phrase.

× Yes, of course, nowadays, like we have also have the shirt bags, bags are nice transportation for the short distance that can't make by by like bus or taxi.

✓ Yes, of course. Nowadays we also have shared bikes; bikes are a good way to travel short distances that buses or taxis cannot serve.

Multiple issues: redundancy 'have also have' is incorrect verb duplication (subject-verb agreement/repetition). 'shirt bags' is likely 'shared bikes' (lexical error). 'are nice transportation for the short distance' has article and plural issues and wrong preposition; use 'a good way to travel short distances'. 'that can't make by by like bus or taxi' is ungrammatical passive/agent problem; rephrase 'that buses or taxis cannot serve'. Suggestion: remove duplications, use correct noun 'shared bikes' or 'bicycles', maintain present simple for general truth, and use clear relative clause structure.

× Uh, so bikes, nor are bikes now are very important transport.

✓ So bikes are now a very important form of transport.

The original contains disfluencies and incorrect word order 'nor are bikes now are'. This is a sentence structure and word order error. Replace with clear subject-verb-object order: 'Bikes are now a very important form of transport.' Suggestion: avoid fillers, ensure one verb per clause, and use 'form of transport' for natural English.