Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Content is clear and honest, but answer is slightly repetitive and could be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., reasons or feelings). Avoid redundancy such as repeating 'that's the reason' and phrasing like 'my family's condition'. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'therefore'). Maintain 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school and sometimes borrowed a neighbour's bike to ride with friends on weekends.

제안: The idea is relevant but delivery is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammar mistakes. Begin with a clear topic sentence answering 'yes' or 'no', then support with two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'also') and correct grammar (e.g., 'bikes are very popular', 'you can see them everywhere'). Reduce filler words ('uh', 'like'). Keep it within 2–4 well-formed sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, you can see people riding bicycles in cities and rural areas, especially near markets and schools.

× From my perspective, I believe yes, I serve very popular in our country when everywhere, uh, there is bike like, uh, even when you were working in street or you are passing by anywhere, you tend to see bikes like people using bikes from.

✓ From my perspective, I believe bikes are very popular in my country; everywhere you go you can see people using them, whether at work or when passing by on the street.

Multiple issues fall under incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure: 'I serve very popular' is ungrammatical and likely a misuse of pronouns/verbs; 'there is bike' uses wrong pronoun/number and article; 'you were working in street' mixes tenses and omits the article 'the'; 'people using bikes from' is incomplete and misuses prepositions/pronouns. Correction replaces unclear pronoun/verb phrases with 'bikes are very popular' and uses 'people using them' where 'them' correctly refers to 'bikes'. Suggestions: identify the noun being referred to and use the correct pronoun (them for plural bikes), keep verbs appropriate to present tense (are popular, can see), and include necessary articles ('the street') and prepositions; simplify long spoken fragments into clear clauses.