Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (teach → taught, write → ride) and pronoun agreement (them → it). Avoid contradictions (saying you were afraid yet still rode) without explanation. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My grandfather taught me how to ride it when I was about six, and although I was initially afraid, practicing with him made me confident. As a result, I still enjoy cycling today.

제안: Give a direct, confident answer and support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'in my country' repeated, 'not extremely like other European country' → 'unlike many European countries'). Clarify the function of bikes (transport, exercise) and provide a concise comparison or statistic if possible. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Indonesia. Because the climate is tropical and many cities are flat, people often use bicycles for short commutes and exercise. For example, morning groups in parks frequently cycle together for fitness.

× I obviously had a bike when I was a child, it reminds me of the thrilling experience of my life which I'm actually afraid of riding them, but thankfully through my grandfather who teach me how to write it 1 So until now I I'm still riding a bike and.

✓ I obviously had a bike when I was a child; it reminds me of one of the most thrilling experiences of my life, although I was actually afraid of riding it at first. Thankfully my grandfather taught me how to ride it, so until now I still ride a bike.

Multiple past-tense verbs are used incorrectly or inconsistently. 'Teach' should be in the past tense 'taught' because it refers to a completed action in the past. 'Write' is wrong word choice; the intended verb is 'ride'. 'I'm actually afraid' should be 'I was actually afraid' to keep past-time consistency because the fear refers to the past event of learning to ride. Use 'it' (singular) instead of 'them' to refer to 'a bike'. Also replace the comma splice with proper punctuation and rephrase for clarity. Suggestion: maintain past tense for actions that happened in childhood, use correct past participle 'taught', and use consistent pronouns ('it') for singular nouns.

× I obviously had a bike when I was a child, it reminds me of the thrilling experience of my life which I'm actually afraid of riding them, but thankfully through my grandfather who teach me how to write it 1 So until now I I'm still riding a bike and.

✓ I obviously had a bike when I was a child; it reminds me of one of the most thrilling experiences of my life, although I was actually afraid of riding it at first. Thankfully my grandfather taught me how to ride it, so until now I still ride a bike.

The sentence uses 'them' to refer to 'a bike', which is singular; this is a singular/plural mismatch. Use 'it' to refer to a singular noun. Also 'a bike' and 'it' must agree in number. Suggestion: replace plural pronouns with singular pronouns when referring to a singular noun.

× ...but thankfully through my grandfather who teach me how to write it

✓ ...but thankfully my grandfather taught me how to ride it

The verb 'teach' is incorrectly inflected for the past and for third person: 'who teach me' should be 'who taught me' because the subject is third-person singular and the action occurred in the past. Also 'write' is the wrong verb; it should be 'ride'. Suggestion: use 'taught' for past actions and ensure correct verb form for third-person subjects.

× I quite think that bike is uh, most likely popular in our country, in my country, I mean like in Indonesia, because the weather is not extremely like other European country, it is actually a tropical country, so many people use it as a sports.

✓ I think that bikes are most likely popular in my country, Indonesia, because the weather is not as extreme as in many European countries; it is a tropical country, so many people use bikes for sport.

Several preposition and comparative structure errors: 'in our country, in my country' is redundant; use one. 'Not extremely like other European country' is incorrect: use 'not as extreme as in many European countries'. 'Use it as a sports' misuses preposition and number: 'use bikes for sport' is correct. Suggestion: use 'as...as' for comparisons, use plural 'countries' when comparing to more than one, and use 'for' to indicate purpose ('for sport'). Also change 'bike' to plural 'bikes' to match general statement.

× I quite think that bike is uh, most likely popular in our country, in my country, I mean like in Indonesia, because the weather is not extremely like other European country, it is actually a tropical country, so many people use it as a sports.

✓ I think that bikes are most likely popular in my country, Indonesia, because the weather is not as extreme as in many European countries; it is a tropical country, so many people use bikes for sport.

The original sentence uses singular 'bike' when speaking generally; general statements should use plural 'bikes' or 'the bicycle'. Also 'other European country' should be plural 'European countries' when referring to Europe in general. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and ensure noun number matches the scope of comparison.