Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (uh, you know) and repetition. Use past-tense consistently and correct article usage (a red bicycle). Limit to no more than 3–4 sentences and include a linking word if adding more detail.

예시: Yes, I did. My father bought me a red bicycle for my eleventh birthday, and it was my dream present. I used it every weekend to ride around the neighborhood, which helped me become more confident and independent.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then add specific, coherent supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use present perfect or present simple) and vocabulary (bike lanes, popular). Avoid vague time references like '2 years later' without context. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bikes have become much more popular in recent years. For example, many cities have built dedicated bike lanes and shared-bike schemes, which makes cycling more convenient and safer for commuters.

× It was a gift for me from my dad.

✓ It was a gift to me from my dad.

The original sentence uses an acceptable structure but 'a gift for me from my dad' is less natural than 'a gift to me from my dad.' Use 'to' to indicate the recipient of the gift. Suggestion: say 'a gift to me from my dad.'

× When I turned to 11, my dad bought me uh, red bicycle, you know, it was my uh, dream, uh, a while later, I.

✓ When I turned 11, my dad bought me a red bicycle; it was my dream.

Problems: unnecessary 'to' after 'turned' and missing article 'a' before 'red bicycle.' The sentence also has extra filler words and fragments ('a while later, I'). Correct: 'When I turned 11' (no 'to'), include 'a' before singular countable noun, and combine clauses cleanly. Suggestion: 'When I turned 11, my dad bought me a red bicycle; it was my dream.'

× Umm, 2 years later it was not that popular, but uh, from recent years it become quite well known and in my country there are special arose for bikers.

✓ Two years ago it was not that popular, but in recent years it has become quite well known, and in my country there are special areas for bikers.

Multiple issues: time expression and tense mismatch ('2 years later' incorrect for past reference; use 'Two years ago' or 'A couple of years ago'); present perfect 'has become' is required for a change continuing to the present; 'become' needs third-person singular auxiliary 'has'; 'arose' is wrong word form — likely meant 'areas.' Also spell out numbers in speech. Suggestion: 'Two years ago it was not that popular, but in recent years it has become quite well known, and in my country there are special areas for bikers.'

× Umm, it is quite convenient of course.

✓ Umm, it is quite convenient, of course.

This is mainly punctuation/word order: adding a comma before 'of course' makes the phrase a parenthetical comment and improves naturalness. The sentence is otherwise grammatically acceptable. Suggestion: include a comma: 'it is quite convenient, of course.'