Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Content and intent are fine, but there are several language errors, awkward phrasing and some unclear words. Improve accuracy (verb forms, word choice) and clarity, keep responses concise (max 5 sentences), and organize with a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. For example: start with a clear topic sentence (“Yes, I did.”), then add one detail about the bike and one specific memory, using connectors like “because” or “so.”

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small pink bicycle when I was nine, and I often rode it to the riverside near our house. I loved the freedom it gave me because I could explore the neighborhood on my own, and many afternoons I spent cycling with friends.

제안: The answer repeats personal anecdote rather than addressing the question about popularity. To improve, respond directly first (topic sentence stating your opinion about popularity), then briefly support it with specific reasons or examples and linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “so”). Keep to 2–4 sentences and correct verb tense consistency.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, in cities you can see many people commuting by bike, and in rural areas families often use bicycles for errands and leisure on weekends.

× Yes, of course. My parents bought me a small pink bicycle when I turned 9 and I often wrote it would be bother to the Riverside near a house.

✓ Yes, of course. My parents bought me a small pink bicycle when I turned 9 and I often rode it to the riverside near our house.

The sentence uses 'wrote' and 'would be bother' which are incorrect verbs and forms for the intended past habitual action. 'Rode' is the correct past tense of 'ride' to match the past timeframe ('bought', 'turned 9'). 'Would be bother' is ungrammatical; the intended meaning is likely 'rode it to the riverside near our house.' Also 'Riverside' should be lowercase unless part of a proper name, and 'a house' should be 'our house' to be consistent with context. Suggestion: use consistent past tense verbs for actions that occurred in the past and choose accurate verb forms (ride -> rode).

× I love the freedom it gave me and spends many afternoons exploring the area.

✓ I loved the freedom it gave me and spent many afternoons exploring the area.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I love' and 'spends' with past context 'it gave me.' Because the actions are framed in the past (bought, turned 9), the verbs should be in the past tense: 'loved' (not 'love') and 'spent' (subject 'I' requires 'spent', not 'spends'). Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent; for past narratives use past tense for all verbs describing those events.