Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答をもっと自然で文法的に正しくし、論理的に繋げる必要があります。トピック文（過去に自転車を持っていたか）に直接答えた後、過去形を一貫して使い、頻度や理由などの具体的な詳細を加えてください。例えば、接続詞（“also”, “because”, “so”など）を適切に使い、発話の繰り返しや不要な間投詞（“uh”）を減らしましょう。また、文は最大5文以内に収め、語彙は日常語を中心に正確に使ってください。

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it to the park with my family, and I usually cycled to school every day. Because we lived close to school, biking was convenient and saved time. As a result, I grew to enjoy riding and felt more independent.

제안: 理由の説明で語彙と文法の正確さを改善してください。特に比較表現（“cheaper than”）と形容詞の使い方（“lightning bicycle”ではなく“light bicycle”や単に“bicycle”）を正しくし、接続詞で文章を滑らかにつなげ、具体例やデータを加えると説得力が増します。また冗長な表現を避け、一貫した主語・述語の構造を保ってください。

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. They are much cheaper to buy and maintain than cars or taking trains, and they also save people money on fuel and fares. In addition, cycling is environmentally friendly and helps reduce traffic congestion, so more and more people choose to ride bikes for short trips.

× Yes I did uh, when I was a child I often go to park with my family by bike.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often went to the park with my family by bike.

The sentence refers to habitual actions in the past, so the simple past tense 'went' should be used instead of present 'go'. Also include articles ('the park') and commas for clarity. Improve by using consistent past tense for past time expressions and adding necessary articles and punctuation.

× And also I usually go to school by bike so I like riding.

✓ I also usually went to school by bike, so I liked riding.

The student is talking about past habits ('when I was a child'), so 'go' and 'like' must be in the past tense ('went', 'liked'). Keep tense consistent with the time frame. If referring to a current habit, keep present tense, but here past is required.

× Yes I do, this is because lighting bicycle is more cheaper than using car or trains.

✓ Yes, I do. This is because lightweight bicycles are cheaper than cars or trains.

'Lighting bicycle' is incorrect; the intended adjective is 'lightweight' or 'light'. 'More cheaper' is redundant; use 'cheaper'. Also use plural 'cars' and drop 'using' before modes of transport. Ensure noun forms and comparative structures are correct.

× Also bike is economically friendly.

✓ Also, bikes are economically friendly.

Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Economically friendly' is unnatural; 'economical' or 'cost-effective' is better. Maintain subject-verb number agreement and use appropriate adjective form.

× So many more and more people.

✓ So more and more people are using them.

The original fragment lacks a verb and clear subject. Add a verb phrase ('are using them') to complete the sentence and clarify meaning. 'Many more and more people' is ungrammatical; use 'more and more people' with a verb.