Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and expand slightly with one or two specific supporting details. Remove filler words like "uh" and use past tense consistently. For example, state why you wanted to learn and mention who taught you or how you eventually learned (if applicable). Keep the reply within 2–4 sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "so".

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I was eager to learn because my friends often went cycling together. Eventually, my older cousin taught me how to ride when I was ten, and I practiced in the park every weekend.

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and specificity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific examples or reasons, using linking words like "for example", "however" or "because". Correct errors (e.g., "young generations" → "young people", remove "their countries", fix "are seem to be" and complete the last sentence). Keep answers concise (3–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people, because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many students use bicycles to commute to school and college. However, there are frequent accidents on busy roads, so more safety measures are needed.

× I was really eager to learn it.

✓ I was really eager to learn to ride one.

The original sentence is understandable but awkward because the verb 'learn' requires a complement; 'learn it' is vague. In the context of bicycles, the correct structure is 'learn to ride (a bike/one)'. Keep past tense 'was' to match the time frame.

× Bikes are very popular among the young generations.

✓ Bikes are very popular among the younger generations.

'Young generations' is grammatically acceptable but 'younger generations' is more natural. The issue relates to noun phrase choice and agreement in register. Use 'younger generations' to indicate relative youth across generations.

× Most of the boys in many of their countries are seem to be fascinated with bikes.

✓ In many of their countries, most boys seem to be fascinated with bikes.

Original contains extra words and incorrect verb combination 'are seem to be'. 'Seem' should be used without 'are' here. Also word order is awkward: move the locative phrase to the start and use 'most boys' rather than 'most of the boys'. This corrects sentence structure and subject-verb usage.

× They love to enjoy long bike rides with their friends or family.

✓ They enjoy long bike rides with their friends or family.

The verb pair 'love to enjoy' is redundant. Use either 'love' + verb (they love taking long bike rides) or simply 'enjoy long bike rides'. 'Enjoy' already conveys pleasure, so 'love to enjoy' is incorrect and wordy.

× However, it is also seen that bike accidents.

✓ However, bike accidents are also common.

Original is ungrammatical and incomplete ('it is also seen that' is wordy and passive without a main verb for 'bike accidents'). Rephrase to an active, complete sentence: 'bike accidents are also common' conveys the intended meaning succinctly and uses correct subject-verb structure.