Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, accurate and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, correct word choice (bike not fight), and give one or two specific supporting details about when/how you learned to ride. Use linking words to show sequence (e.g. "so", "then"). Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 short sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I only learned to ride when I was 20 years old because my friend encouraged me to practice. As a result, I spent a few weekends practicing in a quiet park until I felt confident.

제안: Answer directly, then add one or two specific reasons or comparisons. Correct grammar and word order, and use linking words (e.g. "because", "however", "for example"). Avoid repetition and vague phrases like "so many like". Keep answers concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities where people use them for short commutes. For example, many residents cycle to work because traffic is heavy and public transport can be crowded. However, I was surprised when I visited Vancouver to see many dedicated bike lanes, which we have less of at home.

× No, I didn't have a fight when I was a child, so I learned how to ride a bike. When I was 20 years old.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, so I learned how to ride one when I was 20 years old.

The original sentence contains a word choice error ('fight' instead of 'bike') and a sentence segmentation/structure issue. 'Fight' is incorrect in context; the correct noun is 'bike'. Also the two fragments should be combined to show cause and time clearly: use 'one' to avoid repetition and place the time phrase 'when I was 20 years old' with the clause about learning. Suggestion: replace incorrect word, combine fragments into a single clear sentence, and use 'one' to refer back to 'bike'.

× Yes, I think bikes are pretty popular in my home country, especially for transportation. I was surprised when I was when I came to Vancouver and there are so many like bikes only lane but in my home country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are pretty popular in my home country, especially for transportation. I was surprised when I came to Vancouver because there are so many bike-only lanes, which we don't have in my home country.

The original contains repetition ('when I was when I came'), incorrect phrase order ('so many like bikes only lane'), and an incomplete comparison to the home country. Correct by removing duplicated words, using 'because' to link cause and effect, using the adjective-noun order 'bike-only lanes', and adding a clear contrasting clause 'which we don't have in my home country' for completeness. Also maintain past tense 'came' for the event of arriving in Vancouver.