Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting reasons, and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct past tense forms. Aim for 2–3 sentences, e.g. mention exactly when and why you were afraid and whether you later learned to ride.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was too afraid to ride. For example, I once fell while trying to balance, so my parents didn't buy one for me, and I only learned to ride when I was a teenager.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, support it with specific reasons and an example, and reduce fillers (uh, yeah). Use linking words (because, therefore, for example) and vary vocabulary (motorbikes, affordable, common). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars and motorbikes are relatively cheap. For example, students and delivery workers often use bikes for commuting and short trips, so you see them everywhere in cities.

× Come when I was a child, I didn't have a bike because I was very afraid of riding a bike at that time.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike because I was very afraid of riding one at that time.

The original sentence begins with 'Come when I was a child,' which is ungrammatical and likely a misphrase; this is a sentence structure error. Also 'riding a bike' repeated is redundant; using 'one' avoids repetition. Suggestion: start with a temporal clause 'When I was a child,' then follow with the main clause.

× But now I do know it.

✓ But now I do know how to ride a bike.

The sentence 'But now I do know it.' is vague and lacks a clear object, causing a sentence structure error. The intended meaning is likely 'how to ride a bike.' Suggest explicitly stating the skill to make the sentence complete.

× I'm pretty much sure I was very scared at that time and also I was very shy to ride a bike and that's why I didn't want any kind of bike since my childhood.

✓ I'm pretty sure I was very scared at that time and I was too shy to ride a bike, which is why I didn't want any kind of bike during my childhood.

Mixed tense and awkward phrasing cause a present tense issue and sentence structure problems. 'I'm pretty much sure' is better as 'I'm pretty sure.' 'Shy to ride' is acceptable but 'too shy to ride' is more natural. 'Since my childhood' is incorrect because it implies continuity up to now; use 'during my childhood' for a past period. Suggest maintaining consistent tense and choosing correct time expressions.

× Yeah, I do think bikes are very much, uh, popular in my country because, uh, not many people can afford the cars.

✓ Yeah, I do think bikes are very popular in my country because not many people can afford cars.

'Very much popular' is incorrect collocation; use 'very popular.' 'Afford the cars' incorrectly uses the definite article with a general plural; use 'cars.' This is an incorrect use of quantifiers/articles. Suggest common collocations and correct article usage for general statements.

× But yeah, affording the bikes at a much reasonable rate is very much popular in my country.

✓ But yeah, buying bikes at reasonable prices is very common in my country.

The phrase 'affording the bikes at a much reasonable rate is very much popular' is ungrammatical and awkward: wrong verb form ('affording' used as a noun), wrong modifiers ('much reasonable') and collocation ('very much popular'). This is a sentence structure error. Suggest using 'buying bikes at reasonable prices' and 'very common' or 'very popular.'

× People love to uh, ride a bike also for fun, also, uh.

✓ People also love to ride bikes for fun.

The original has filler words and awkward word order. 'Ride a bike also for fun, also' is repetitive and ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure error. Suggest removing fillers and placing 'also' before the verb or after the subject: 'People also love to ride bikes for fun.'