Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法と時制（過去形）の誤り、繰り返しの語や不要な

예시: Yes, I did. When I was in elementary school, my father bought a large bicycle for my birthday. It was bright red and had a bell, so I felt very proud to ride it to my friends' houses.

제안: 理由提示が曖昧で語彙の使い方が不自然です。具体的な理由と一貫した構成（話題文→具体例→結果）を心がけ、つなぎ語を使って流れを作ってください。

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in Japan. One reason is that many cities are compact and have good cycling paths, so people find cycling convenient. For example, students often cycle to school, which reduces traffic and is good for the environment.

× Yes, I do. When I, when I was elementary school, uh, my, my father buy a big, big bicycle for my birthday.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was in elementary school, my father bought a big bicycle for my birthday.

The sentence has multiple tense and agreement problems. 'Yes, I do' should be 'Yes, I did' to match the past-time question 'Did you have a bike...'. 'When I was elementary school' is missing the preposition 'in' (preposition error) and should be 'When I was in elementary school'. 'My father buy' is present-tense and also lacks subject-verb agreement for past reference; it should be the past tense 'my father bought'. To improve, ensure the tense matches the time frame given by the question (past), include necessary prepositions for places/periods ('in elementary school'), and use past tense verbs for completed past actions ('bought').

× Yes, I do. I have only one reason. Uh, in Japan there are a lot of uh, environmental, so we can feel, we can feel green, uh, to ride the bicycle.

✓ Yes, I do. I have only one reason. In Japan there is a lot of emphasis on the environment, so we can feel that riding a bicycle is 'green'.

The student mixes present-tense responses with unclear noun usage. 'In Japan there are a lot of uh, environmental' is incomplete and incorrect; 'environmental' is an adjective and needs a noun such as 'policies' or 'awareness' or the phrase 'emphasis on the environment'. Also the clause 'so we can feel, we can feel green, to ride the bicycle' is ungrammatical and awkward; it should express that riding a bicycle feels environmentally friendly, e.g. 'so we can feel that riding a bicycle is "green"' or 'so riding bicycles feels environmentally friendly'. To improve, use the correct noun form (environment or environmental awareness), keep clauses concise, and ensure verbs and phrases clearly convey the intended meaning.