Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'improve' → 'improved' or 'helps') and avoid filler (uh). Keep responses to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to visit friends and go to school because it kept me active and healthy. Moreover, biking was an eco-friendly way to travel, so my family preferred it over taking motorbikes.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons with clearer vocabulary and grammar. Replace unclear phrases ('Thai purchase') with correct terms (e.g., 'many people' or 'many families'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' appropriately and avoid repetition and fillers.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Vietnam. Many people use bicycles for short trips and commuting because they are cheap and convenient. Also, cycling is environmentally friendly and helps avoid traffic in crowded cities.

× Actually, when I was a child, I usually traveled to another place by bike because it's improve my health and also travelled linked to another place, uh, by bike will help, uh, the environment more.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I usually traveled to other places by bike because it improved my health, and traveling to other places by bike also helped the environment.

Errors: mixed tense and incorrect verb forms. 'It's improve' is incorrect: after 'it' + verb you need third-person singular present ('improves') if describing a general truth, but the main clause refers to past habitual action ('when I was a child, I usually traveled'), so use past tense 'improved'. 'Travelled linked to another place' is ungrammatical; use 'traveling to other places' (gerund) to show the activity. Also 'will help' is future and conflicts with past context; change to past 'helped'. Suggestions: keep consistent tense (past) for habits in childhood; use correct verb forms (past simple for completed/habitual past) and use gerunds for activities (traveling).

× Yes, definitely, because bikes are ubiquitous in my country, Vietnam. People uh, who have uh, Thai purchase usually travel by bike to another place and because it's also, uh, eco friendly.

✓ Yes, definitely, because bikes are ubiquitous in my country, Vietnam. People who own cheap motorcycles usually travel by bike to get around, and because they are also eco-friendly.

Errors: unclear and incorrect pronoun and noun use. 'Who have Thai purchase' is unintelligible; likely intended 'who have cheap purchases' or 'who have Thai motorcycles' — corrected to 'who own cheap motorcycles' to make sense. 'Travel by bike to another place' is awkward; use 'travel by bike to get around' or 'travel to get around'. 'It's also eco friendly' uses singular pronoun 'it' for plural 'bikes' or people; better 'they are also eco-friendly' or 'bikes are also eco-friendly'. Suggestions: choose clear nouns, use correct verbs for possession ('own'), and match pronouns in number with their antecedents.