Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question in past tense (e.g. “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”). Then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words (for example, describe types of bikes, who you rode with, or how often you rode). Avoid short fragmented sentences and incorrect word forms (e.g. use ‘wheels’ not ‘views’).

예시: Yes — I had two bikes when I was a child. For example, I had a larger bike for riding on roads and a smaller one with training wheels for learning; I used the smaller bike when I first started and switched to the bigger bike after a few months.

제안: Answer directly and use more natural phrasing and specific reasons. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, bicycles are very popular in Thailand.”). Then give one or two specific supporting points with linking words (for example, mention commuting, affordability, or schoolchildren) and correct subject–verb agreement and pronouns. Avoid awkward phrases like ‘from each place to each place’ and ‘shall’.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Thailand. For instance, many people use bikes for short commutes because they are cheap and convenient; also, a lot of schoolchildren cycle to school, especially in smaller towns.

× I have to bike when I was a kid.

✓ I had a bike when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with the past time reference 'when I was a kid'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Use past simple for events or states in the past (I had).

× The bigger one and the small one.

✓ I had a bigger one and a smaller one.

This fragment lacks a verb and clear structure. Turn it into a complete sentence by adding subject and verb and making adjective agreement consistent ('smaller' instead of 'small'). Suggestion: Use a full clause: 'I had a bigger one and a smaller one.'

× The bigger one have uh, 2 views and the small one have only four views.

✓ The bigger one has two wheels and the smaller one has only four wheels.

'One' is singular so the verb must be 'has' not 'have' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'views' is incorrect word choice; context requires 'wheels'. Use consistent adjectives ('smaller') and spell out numbers in normal writing or use digits consistently. Suggestion: Match singular subject with 'has' and use correct noun 'wheels'.

× Bicycle is very popular in Thailand because they used the bicycle to transport from each place to each place.

✓ Bicycles are very popular in Thailand because people use them to travel from place to place.

Use plural 'Bicycles' to speak generally about the type (or add 'The bicycle' for the general concept). The clause uses past 'used' incorrectly; present simple 'use' matches the general fact. 'They' is unclear; use 'people' as a general subject. 'Transport from each place to each place' is unnatural; use 'travel from place to place.' Suggestion: Use plural for general statements and present simple for habitual facts.

× Many shall use them to go to the school.

✓ Many people use them to go to school.

'Many' alone is incomplete; use 'many people'. 'Shall' is inappropriate for a general statement; use present simple 'use'. 'Go to the school' is usually 'go to school' in general statements. Suggestion: For habitual actions, use 'many people use them to go to school.'