Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, and add one specific supporting detail. Avoid filler words like "uh". Also keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, correct "When I was child" to "When I was a child", and combine ideas: mention the bike, its color, and who gave it and why it was special.

예시: Yes. When I was a child I had a black bicycle that my grandmother gave me for my 15th birthday. I rode it every day to visit friends and I remember feeling very proud because it was my first grown-up bike.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, use linking words for coherence, avoid repetitive fillers, and provide specific reasons or examples. Replace vague words like "famous" with "popular" and correct grammar (e.g., "use them to commute to work"). Limit to 3–4 sentences and include one concrete example or statistic if possible.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people commute to work by bicycle because it is cheap and avoids traffic. In addition, a lot of people cycle for exercise and to reduce pollution, especially in big cities where there are bike lanes.

× When I was child I used to ride a black bike.

✓ When I was a child I used to ride a black bike.

The noun 'child' requires the definite article 'a' in this context (singular countable noun). Use 'a child' to indicate a non-specific childhood period. Also 'used to' correctly indicates past habit so no other tense change is needed.

× It was gifted by my grandmother on my 15th birthday.

✓ It was a gift from my grandmother for my 15th birthday.

'Gifted by' is grammatically possible but less natural; 'a gift from' is more idiomatic. Use the preposition 'for' to indicate the occasion (birthday). Alternatively, 'It was given to me by my grandmother on my 15th birthday' is correct; the original preposition 'on' with 'birthday' is acceptable but changing structure improves naturalness.

× Certainly bikes are really famous in my country, umm, most people use them to travel to the workplaces.

✓ Certainly, bikes are very common in my country; most people use them to travel to work.

'Famous' is used for people or places; 'common' or 'popular' is better for objects. 'Workplaces' with 'the' is awkward; use 'work' for the activity/destination. Also add a comma after 'Certainly' and simplify adverbs ('really' to 'very') for natural speech.

× Apart from this, many people use it uh, to do exercises, uh, and, uh, help, uh, in environment.

✓ Apart from that, many people use them to exercise and to help the environment.

Use 'that' instead of 'this' to refer back to the previous idea. 'Bikes' is plural, so the pronoun must be plural ('them' not 'it'). 'Do exercises' is more naturally 'exercise'. 'Help in environment' is ungrammatical; use 'help the environment' or 'help protect the environment'. Removed filler words and smoothed phrase order for clarity.