T-shirt— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence stating frequency, then give one or two specific reasons or contexts using linking words. Reduce filler words (like 'uh', repeated words) and correct small grammar issues (e.g. 'they give me comfort', 'for college and at home').

예시: I wear T-shirts almost every day. I usually wear them to college and when I do art at home because they are comfortable and easy to move in, so I prefer them over other clothes.

제안: Make a clear, direct statement about frequency, then give a brief reason and an example of how you buy them. Avoid repeating similar words ('usually I often') and correct phrasing ('a bit of a shopaholic').

예시: Yes, I buy T-shirts quite often because I value comfort more than fashion. For example, I usually order them online but I also buy some when I visit malls.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary and grammar. Start with a topic sentence (e.g. 'T-shirts are common but not seen as fashionable by older people'), then explain briefly why, using linking words. Fix errors (plural agreement, awkward phrasing).

예시: T-shirts are common among older people in my country, but they are seen mainly as casual or comfortable clothing rather than fashionable. Many older adults wear them at home or for errands because they are practical.

제안: Give a concise answer with one clear reason and one specific memory or example. Remove hesitations and repetitions. Use past tense consistently and avoid vague phrases like 'comfort place'.

예시: Yes, I did. I often wore T-shirts as a child because they were comfortable and easy to play in; I especially remember wearing cotton T-shirts when I played outside with my friends.

× I wear T-shirts very frequently.

✓ I wear T-shirts very frequently.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses the simple present to describe a habitual action. Keep as is.

× Like mostly I usually I wear the T-shirts for my college and art at home because I always prefer comfort so they give me a comfort.

✓ Mostly, I usually wear T-shirts to college and when doing art at home because I prefer comfort and they are comfortable.

Original sentence has redundancy and awkward structure ('Like mostly I usually I'). Simplify by using one frequency adverb ('mostly' or 'usually') and correct preposition ('to college' and 'when doing art at home'). Replace 'they give me a comfort' with 'they are comfortable'. Suggestion: remove filler words and order adverbs before the main verb.

× Then I just love to wear the T-shirts.

✓ I just love wearing T-shirts.

Use the gerund 'wearing' after 'love' for natural phrasing. Also drop the article when speaking generally about T-shirts. Keep simple present to express general preference.

× I am a bit shopaholic person and I always prefer my comfort over any fashionable products so I usually I often buy the T-shirts online or whenever I got a chance to visit any shop.

✓ I am a bit of a shopaholic and I always prefer comfort over fashionable items, so I usually buy T-shirts online or whenever I get a chance to visit a shop.

Fix article and noun phrase ('a bit of a shopaholic'), redundancy ('usually I often'), verb tense ('got' -> 'get' for habitual present), and word choice ('fashionable items' rather than 'products'). Place adverbs properly and use present simple for habits.

× If I talk about my country specifically over there, T-shirts is a comfortable zone for most of the older people in my nation, but they don't view it as a fashion, they just usually wear they.

✓ If I talk about my country, T-shirts are a comfortable choice for most older people, but they don't see them as fashionable; they just usually wear them.

Use plural verb 'are' to agree with plural 'T-shirts'. Replace 'zone' with 'choice' for natural collocation. Correct pronoun 'they' to 'them' as object. Use 'see them as fashionable' instead of 'view it as a fashion'.

× I'm very fond of wearing the T-shirts.

✓ I'm very fond of wearing T-shirts.

No tense change needed, but remove the article when speaking generally. Present perfect continuous not required; the sentence correctly expresses a general preference.

× Yes, definitely. I wore uh, T-shirt when I was a kid as they gave me, as they, they, they were my comfort place.

✓ Yes, definitely. I wore T-shirts when I was a kid because they were comfortable and gave me comfort.

Use plural 'T-shirts' to match general reference and past simple 'wore' is correct. Remove filler repeats and use clear causal connector 'because'. Replace awkward 'comfort place' with 'were comfortable and gave me comfort'.

× So I am carrying the same value and hobby.

✓ So I still have the same preference and hobby.

Use 'still have' to express continuation from past to present. 'Carrying the same value' is unnatural; 'preference' fits better. 'Hobby' is acceptable if the student considers wearing T-shirts a habit or hobby.