Number— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は少し冗長で、文法的な誤りもあります。より自然で効果的な答えにするために、主題文を明確にし、具体的な詳細を簡潔に述べることが重要です。例えば、子供の頃の興味と記憶力の関連を明確にし、文を短く区切ると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I am good at remembering numbers. For example, when I was a child, I enjoyed watching baseball and could remember the uniform numbers of all the players, which was one of my favorite hobbies.

제안: 回答は内容がやや不明瞭で、文法的な誤りもあります。より明確で論理的な回答にするために、主題文をはっきり述べ、具体的な数字の例を整理して述べることが望ましいです。接続詞を使って文の流れを良くしましょう。

예시: Yes, I will use numbers in my future work as a journalist. For instance, I often report on scientific achievements and economic news, which require me to handle data like the number of Nobel Prize medals awarded and economic growth rates.

제안: 回答は文法的に不自然で、内容が混乱しています。否定の主題文を明確にし、その理由を簡潔に述べ、代わりに好きだったことを具体的に説明すると良いでしょう。接続詞を使って文をつなげることも重要です。

예시: No, I did not enjoy studying math as a child because I preferred playing outside. Calculating numbers was frustrating for me. Instead, I enjoyed playing music and doing sports.

제안: 回答の冒頭の接続詞「And」は不要で、文が長くてわかりにくいです。主題文を明確にし、理由を簡潔に述べ、具体的な例を整理して述べると良いでしょう。文法の改善も必要です。

예시: The most important number to me is 6. When I was in junior high school, I played baseball and my position was shortstop, which is number 6. Because of that, I often choose 'A6' when selecting options in local text boxes.

× Yes, I am confident that I can remember how many numbers and when I was a child I was interested in watching a baseball game and I remember the all over uniform numbers of the athletes and that was one of my best hobbies.

✓ Yes, I am confident that I can remember many numbers. When I was a child, I was interested in watching baseball games, and I remember all the uniform numbers of the athletes. That was one of my best hobbies.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, making it confusing. Breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity and readability.

× So I have to handle with a lot of numbers such as the numbers of the medals of Nobel Prize and how their economic growth number is and others.

✓ So I have to handle a lot of numbers, such as the number of Nobel Prize medals, their economic growth figures, and others.

The phrase 'handle with' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'handle' without 'with'. Also, 'numbers of the medals of Nobel Prize' is awkward; it should be 'number of Nobel Prize medals'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.

× No, I don't like studying mathematics because I liked to play outside and calculate something is one of the most irritating experience for me when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't like studying mathematics because I liked to play outside, and calculating was one of the most irritating experiences for me when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Don't like' should be 'didn't like' to match past context. 'Calculate something is' is incorrect; it should be 'calculating was'. Also, 'experience' should be plural 'experiences'.

× Instead, I liked to play some music and doing some sports.

✓ Instead, I liked to play some music and do some sports.

After 'liked', the verbs should be in the infinitive form 'to play' and 'to do' or both gerunds. Mixing 'to play' and 'doing' is incorrect. Here, 'do' is the correct form to parallel 'play'.

× And the most important number is 6 because when I was a junior high school student I played baseball and my position number on the shortest spot is 6 and so I always choose A6 when I have to select the local and text box.

✓ The most important number is 6 because when I was a junior high school student, I played baseball and my position number at the shortstop is 6. So I always choose A6 when I have to select the local and text box.

The phrase 'on the shortest spot' is incorrect; the correct term is 'at the shortstop' (a baseball position). Also, the sentence is long and needs commas for clarity.