Number— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy, such as "memorize remember" and repeated ideas. Try to be more concise and clear, and avoid repeating the same point. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: No, I am not good at remembering numbers. For instance, I often struggle to recall important dates, which affected my history grades. Therefore, memorizing numbers has never been my strong suit.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Avoid unfinished sentences and ensure your ideas are fully expressed. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific details about how you will use numbers in your work.

예시: Yes, I will definitely use numbers in my future work. For example, as a data analyst, I will need to interpret numerical data to provide accurate results. Moreover, since I am pursuing an MBA in Business Management, understanding numbers is essential for decision-making.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains filler words like "uh" and "umm" which reduce fluency. Try to avoid these and use more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to show contrast between your earlier and later experience.

예시: Yes, I loved studying math as a child and usually scored among the highest in my class until the 10th grade. However, after that, I found it difficult to grasp the subject and my interest declined.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, with repeated words and missing linking words. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid repetition.

예시: The numbers that are important to me include my mobile phone number, my passwords, and the birthdays of my loved ones. These numbers help me stay connected and remember special occasions.

× I really memorize remember important dates even.

✓ I really remember important dates even.

The sentence contains redundant verbs 'memorize' and 'remember' together, which is incorrect. The correct verb here is 'remember' to express recalling information. Remove 'memorize' to correct the sentence.

× So memorizing number has never been my strong point.

✓ So memorizing numbers has never been my strong point.

The noun 'number' should be plural 'numbers' because it refers to multiple numbers in general, not a single number. Using plural form is appropriate here.

× if I work as data analysis, I have to figure out all the numbers in the data to give the results

✓ if I work as a data analyst, I have to figure out all the numbers in the data to give the results

'Data analysis' is a process or field, but the person is a 'data analyst'. The sentence requires the noun for the profession, so 'a data analyst' is correct.

× and moreover, as I belong to MBA Business Management professor of profession, so I have.

✓ Moreover, as I belong to the MBA Business Management profession, I have to use numbers.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Belong to MBA Business Management professor of profession' is incorrect. It should be 'belong to the MBA Business Management profession'. Also, 'so I have' is incomplete; the sentence needs completion to make sense.

× I love to study math as a child and fortunately I got uh, almost highest marks every time in my class in the math until 10th uh, after then, I don't know what happened to umm, this particular subject.

✓ I loved studying math as a child and fortunately I got almost the highest marks every time in my math class until 10th grade. After that, I don't know what happened to this particular subject.

The sentence mixes present tense 'love' with past context 'as a child'. It should be past tense 'loved'. Also, 'study math' should be 'studying math' for correct verb form. 'After then' is incorrect; 'after that' is appropriate. 'Almost highest marks' needs 'the' before 'highest'.

× I hardly able to grasp the math.

✓ I was hardly able to grasp math.

The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'was' for past ability. Also, 'the math' is unnecessary; 'math' is uncountable and does not need 'the' here.

× Numbers that are important to me is basically my mobile phone number and my my passwords, my birthday to my loved one birthday so.

✓ Numbers that are important to me are basically my mobile phone number, my passwords, my birthday, and my loved one's birthday.

The subject 'Numbers' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'my my' is a repetition error. 'My loved one birthday' should be possessive 'my loved one's birthday'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.