News— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态和语法的正确性。

예시: To be honest, I wasn't interested in the news before because I didn't think it was relevant to my life. However, recently I realized that news can influence my life, especially when I invest in the stock market. Now, I am more interested in following the news.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，避免重复和不连贯的表达，同时增加连接词使回答更流畅。

예시: In the past, I could only watch news on TV. But now, with the development of technology, I usually get news on my phone, mostly from social media platforms like WeChat and Weibo.

제안: 回答内容较完整，但表达略显重复，建议使用更简洁的句子，并注意词汇的准确使用，如“introvert”应为“introverted”。

예시: I don't think I would like to be a journalist because I am quite shy and introverted. If I were more outgoing, I might be better at interviewing people. Also, my major is in financial education, so I prefer to study that field.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简化表达，使用连贯的句子，并避免口语填充词，使回答更自然流畅。

예시: I didn't read the news intentionally this morning, but with social media, news often pops up on my phone. So, I occasionally read some news when I have time in the morning.

제안: 回答表达了意思，但有重复和语法问题。建议使用更简洁的句子，避免重复，并使用连接词使回答更连贯。

예시: I don't talk about the news with everyone. I usually discuss news only with friends who are interested in it. With others, we talk more about family matters and daily life.

× before I don't can only watch news on TV, but right now I started technology developped, so, you know, we can search any kind of news on our phone and mostly from the social medias like we chat.

✓ Before, I could only watch news on TV, but right now technology has developed, so, you know, we can search any kind of news on our phone and mostly from social media like WeChat.

句中“don't can”是错误的情态动词用法，正确的表达应为“could”表示过去的能力或可能性。此外，“technology developped”时态错误，应使用现在完成时“has developed”表示技术已经发展。

× To be frankly with you up before I was not interested in news 'cause I didn't find in relative to my life.

✓ To be frank with you, before I was not interested in news because I didn't find it relevant to my life.

“To be frankly”中“frankly”应为形容词“frank”，且“didn't find in relative”结构错误，应为“didn't find it relevant”，使用过去时态表达过去的状态。

× I didn't find in relative to my life.

✓ I didn't find it relevant to my life.

“find in relative”是错误的搭配，应使用“find it relevant to”表示“觉得与……相关”。

× mostly from the social medias like we chat.

✓ mostly from social media like WeChat.

“social media”是不可数名词，不需要加复数形式“medias”，且“we chat”应为专有名词“WeChat”。

× I don't think I am good enough to be a journalist because I am a shy person, which means sometimes I can be more introvert.

✓ I don't think I am good enough to be a journalist because I am a shy person, which means sometimes I can be more introverted.

“introvert”是名词，形容词形式应为“introverted”，用来描述人的性格特征。

× my major was not involved in a journalist.

✓ my major was not related to journalism.

“involved in a journalist”用法错误，应使用“related to journalism”表示“与新闻学无关”。

× If I am an outgoing person, I think I can interview people better.

✓ If I were an outgoing person, I think I could interview people better.

虚拟语气中，表示与事实相反的假设，条件句应使用过去式“were”，主句用“could”表示能力的假设。

× right now, you know, uh, the, as the social media developed so we can see the news automatically, it just popped up from my phone, so I can read some of the news occasionally on my phone.

✓ Right now, you know, as social media has developed, we can see the news automatically; it just pops up on my phone, so I can read some of the news occasionally on my phone.

“as the social media developed”应使用现在完成时“has developed”表示发展到现在的状态；“popped up”应为一般现在时“pops up”，因为描述的是经常发生的动作。

× Once I have time in the morning, I would have a glance at the news.

✓ Once I have time in the morning, I have a glance at the news.

“would have a glance”表达不准确，表示习惯动作时应使用一般现在时“have a glance”。

× Not everyone, you know. I could only talk about the news with some friends who are interested in it and with other friends we would just talk about more about family issues and daily events.

✓ Not everyone, you know. I can only talk about the news with some friends who are interested in it, and with other friends, we just talk more about family issues and daily events.

“could only talk”时态不当，描述现在习惯应使用“can only talk”；“talk about more about”重复，应简化为“talk more about”。

× I shared that news with some some friends who are actually interested in it.

✓ I share that news with some friends who are actually interested in it.

“shared”使用过去时不符合上下文的时间背景，应使用一般现在时“share”；“some some”重复，应去掉一个“some”。