News— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“search some entertainment news”应改为“search for entertainment news”，且句子结构较为混乱。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并避免冗余。

예시: Yes, I am very interested in news, especially entertainment news. I enjoy following celebrities and learning about their latest activities because it makes me feel very happy.

제안: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，缺少关键内容（如“use my”后缺少名词），句子结构混乱。建议明确表达使用的设备或平台，使用连贯的句子，并适当使用连接词。

예시: I usually use my smartphone to find news. I often browse social media platforms like Redbook and WeChat, where I can watch videos and read various news articles.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，且内容不具体。建议使用正确的句子结构，明确表达原因，并提供具体细节。

예시: No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because the job requires a lot of physical stamina and the ability to find interesting news stories, which I don't think suits me.

제안: 回答较长且有些冗余，表达不够简洁。建议直接回答问题，并简洁说明原因，避免重复和不必要的信息。

예시: No, I haven't read the news this morning because I was preparing for this test. After the test, I plan to check the news about the iOS test results.

제안: 回答表达较为自然，但存在重复和语法错误，如“share each others opinion”应为“share each other's opinions”。建议简化句子，使用连贯的连接词，使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, I often talk with my friends about interesting news. We share our opinions and discuss the topics, which makes us feel very happy.

× I really like to search some entertainment news such as some celebrity and knowing what they are doing made me feel over the moon.

✓ I really like searching some entertainment news such as about some celebrities and knowing what they are doing makes me feel over the moon.

动词like后面接动名词形式searching，而不是不定式to search；同时，句中主语是knowing，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式makes。建议将like后接动名词，谓语动词与主语保持一致。

× I really like to search some entertainment news such as some celebrity and knowing what they are doing made me feel over the moon.

✓ I really like searching some entertainment news such as some celebrities and knowing what they are doing makes me feel over the moon.

celebrity应使用复数形式celebrities，因为指的是多个名人。建议根据上下文判断名词单复数形式。

× Actually I usually use my to find news and in many social media there are lots of news we can look for and many applications such as Redbook and some WeChat we can see the video.

✓ Actually, I usually use my phone to find news, and on many social media platforms there is lots of news we can look for. Also, in many applications such as Redbook and WeChat, we can watch videos.

句子结构混乱，缺少必要的名词（my phone），介词使用不当（in many social media应为on many social media platforms），句子过长且缺少连接词。建议补充缺失词汇，调整介词，分句表达更清晰。

× Actually I usually use my to find news and in many social media there are lots of news we can look for and many applications such as Redbook and some WeChat we can see the video.

✓ Actually, I usually use my phone to find news, and on many social media platforms there is lots of news we can look for. Also, in many applications such as Redbook and WeChat, we can watch videos.

介词in用于表示地点时不适合用于social media，正确用法是on social media platforms。建议根据固定搭配选择正确介词。

× No, actually I don't like to be a journalist because become a journalist you need to have many quantity such as you need to have good fitness that you can search some interesting news for people.

✓ No, actually I don't like to be a journalist because to become a journalist you need to have many qualities, such as good fitness, so that you can find some interesting news for people.

缺少不定式to表示目的（to become），many quantity用词错误，应为many qualities；句子逻辑不清，缺少连接词so that。建议使用正确词汇和连接词表达完整意思。

× No, actually I don't like to be a journalist because become a journalist you need to have many quantity such as you need to have good fitness that you can search some interesting news for people.

✓ No, actually I don't like to be a journalist because to become a journalist you need to have many qualities, such as good fitness, so that you can find some interesting news for people.

quantity通常指数量，不适合用来描述人的素质，应使用qualities。建议根据语境选择合适的量词。

× Actually no, because I come to attend this test and I think maybe after this test I will search some news about this iOS test and to check if I could pass this test.

✓ Actually no, because I came to attend this test and I think maybe after this test I will search for some news about this iOS test and check if I can pass this test.

come to attend时态错误，应为过去式came；search后应加介词for；to check前的to可省略；could改为can以符合语境。建议注意时态和固定搭配。

× Actually no, because I come to attend this test and I think maybe after this test I will search some news about this iOS test and to check if I could pass this test.

✓ Actually no, because I came to attend this test and I think maybe after this test I will search for some news about this iOS test and check if I can pass this test.

描述过去发生的动作时，动词应使用过去式came，而不是现在式come。建议根据时间状语判断动词时态。

× Actually no, because I come to attend this test and I think maybe after this test I will search some news about this iOS test and to check if I could pass this test.

✓ Actually no, because I came to attend this test and I think maybe after this test I will search for some news about this iOS test and check if I can pass this test.

search后应加介词for，表示寻找某物。建议注意动词与介词的固定搭配。

× Yes, yes, when I read some interesting and amazing news I will firstly share with my friends and discuss something about the news and we share each others opinion and finally we will feel over the moon after sharing.

✓ Yes, yes, when I read some interesting and amazing news I will first share it with my friends and discuss something about the news. We share each other's opinions and finally we feel over the moon after sharing.

share后应有宾语it；each others应为each other's，表示所有格；opinion应为复数opinions。建议注意代词宾语和所有格的正确使用。