News— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas like 'get information' and 'explore the world around me' twice. Also, improve grammar by saying 'get familiar with the world around me'. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I am interested in news because it helps me stay informed about the world. I usually prefer reading online news since it's convenient to scroll through and select specific articles that interest me.

제안: Your answer contains relevant information but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, 'I have access Internet' should be 'I have access to the Internet'. Also, avoid repeating 'scroll up and down'. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I usually find news through the Internet, especially on social media platforms like Instagram and Telegram, where I can easily browse and select news that interests me. Additionally, I watch TV news programmes when I have free time.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

예시: I have never considered becoming a journalist because I don't enjoy reading large amounts of information. I prefer to read news to stay informed rather than writing articles myself.

제안: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive and incomplete at the end. Avoid repeating similar ideas like 'get information' and 'get news'. Also, complete your sentences and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I read the news this morning to stay updated on the economic and political issues in my country. Many people do this to understand current events better.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I often'. Also, clarify your ideas and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect your thoughts logically.

예시: I sometimes discuss important news, especially about political and economic situations, with my friends because sharing these concerns helps me relieve stress.

× Nowadays I like to get information and get familiar the world around me and I can explore the world around me.

✓ Nowadays I like to get information and get familiar with the world around me and I can explore the world around me.

The phrase 'get familiar the world' is incorrect because the verb 'get familiar' requires the preposition 'with' to indicate what one is becoming familiar with. The correct phrase is 'get familiar with the world.'

× I prefer to read the online news because I can scroll up and down and it's really convenient to choose specific news.

✓ I prefer to read online news because I can scroll up and down and it's really convenient to choose specific news.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'online news.' When referring to news in general, especially in an uncountable sense, the article is usually omitted. Therefore, 'read online news' is correct.

× Since we live in the era of technology, I have access Internet so I get lots of different kinds of news via Internet.

✓ Since we live in the era of technology, I have access to the Internet so I get lots of different kinds of news via the Internet.

The phrase 'have access Internet' is missing the preposition 'to' after 'access.' Also, 'Internet' as a specific noun requires the definite article 'the.' Hence, the correct phrase is 'have access to the Internet.'

× Like I have access to social media like Instagram, telegram so I can scroll up and down and choose a specific news.

✓ I have access to social media like Instagram and Telegram, so I can scroll up and down and choose specific news.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'like' twice and lacks proper conjunctions. Also, 'Telegram' should be capitalised as a proper noun. The phrase 'choose a specific news' is incorrect because 'news' is uncountable and does not take 'a.' It should be 'choose specific news.'

× I never thought about it, but I, uh, think that I don't like to, uh, read lots of things, so I don't this job.

✓ I never thought about it, but I, uh, think that I don't like to, uh, read lots of things, so I don't want this job.

The sentence is missing a verb after 'I don't.' The phrase 'I don't this job' is incomplete and unclear. Adding the verb 'want' clarifies the meaning: 'I don't want this job.'

× So I don't prefer to choose as.

✓ So I don't prefer to choose this.

The phrase 'choose as' is incorrect and incomplete. The correct phrase should be 'choose this' or 'choose it' depending on context. 'As' is not appropriate here.

× Yes, when I get up in morning, I prefer to read news to get lots of information about different issues in my country.

✓ Yes, when I get up in the morning, I prefer to read the news to get lots of information about different issues in my country.

The phrase 'in morning' is missing the definite article 'the.' Also, 'read news' should be 'read the news' when referring to news in general or specific news.

× Since we have lots of economic and political problems in our country, it's really common for people to get information and get news.

✓ Since we have lots of economic and political problems in our country, it's really common for people to get information and news.

The phrase 'get information and get news' is repetitive. Also, 'get news' is sufficient without repeating 'get.' Combining them improves clarity and flow.

× So when I get up early in the morning, I prefer to scroll up and down and.

✓ So when I get up early in the morning, I prefer to scroll up and down.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought. Removing the trailing 'and' corrects the sentence structure.

× When I read lots of important news, especially about political and economical situation, I sometimes share with the news because I get horrified.

✓ When I read lots of important news, especially about the political and economic situation, I sometimes share the news because I get horrified.

The phrase 'share with the news' is incorrect. The verb 'share' should be followed directly by the object, so 'share the news' is correct. Also, 'economical' should be 'economic' when referring to the economy.

× especially about political and economical situation

✓ especially about the political and economic situation

'Economical' means cost-saving, whereas 'economic' relates to the economy. The correct adjective here is 'economic.' Also, the definite article 'the' is needed before 'political and economic situation.'

× I believe that they can relieve my stress, so I often I often talk with.

✓ I believe that they can relieve my stress, so I often talk with them.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive ('I often I often'). Also, 'talk with' requires an object; adding 'them' clarifies who is being talked with.