News— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to make your response more concise and natural by focusing on one main idea and using simpler sentence structures. Also, avoid combining unrelated ideas in one sentence.

예시: Yes, I enjoy watching the news on television every morning while having my coffee. It helps me stay informed about current events.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Also, pay attention to grammar and word order.

예시: I usually get news notifications from BBC News on my phone. This helps me stay updated about important events, such as accidents, throughout the day.

제안: Your answer shows good ideas but the grammar and sentence structure need improvement. Use linking words to connect your ideas and express your thoughts more clearly and naturally.

예시: Yes, I would like to be a journalist because I am curious and want to expose injustices in society. If I become a journalist, I will report on corruption and social issues.

제안: Your answer contains some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to be more specific and use correct grammar. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details linked logically.

예시: Yes, I read a news article this morning about changes in policies affecting international students. I think these changes are unfair because everyone has the right to study abroad and pursue higher education.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid awkward phrases like "attend to discuss" and use simpler expressions. Also, try to link your ideas smoothly.

예시: Not really, because most of my friends aren't interested in the news. They prefer talking about K-pop stars and social media events.

× Yes, I usually watch news from the television in my morning routines with a cup of coffee and discuss the news after a busy day of work.

✓ Yes, I usually watch the news on television during my morning routine with a cup of coffee and discuss the news after a busy day of work.

The phrase 'watch news from the television' is incorrect; it should be 'watch the news on television'. Also, 'morning routines' should be singular 'morning routine' to match the habitual action. 'From the television' is not the correct preposition; 'on television' is standard. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I usually find my news on my, as I said, a notification for BBC News and it's very important for me to know where and when does an accident happened.

✓ I usually find my news through notifications from BBC News, and it's very important for me to know where and when an accident happened.

The phrase 'on my, as I said, a notification' is awkward and incorrect. The correct preposition is 'through' when referring to receiving information via notifications. Also, 'does an accident happened' is incorrect; it should be 'an accident happened' in this context. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually find my news on my, as I said, a notification for BBC News and it's very important for me to know where and when does an accident happened.

✓ I usually find my news through notifications from BBC News, and it's very important for me to know where and when an accident happened.

The phrase 'does an accident happened' incorrectly mixes auxiliary 'does' with past tense 'happened'. The correct form is 'an accident happened' without 'does' because the sentence is a statement, not a question.

× Well, it helped me to stay in for throughout the day.

✓ Well, it helps me to stay informed throughout the day.

The original sentence uses past tense 'helped' which is inconsistent with the habitual action implied. 'Stay in for' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'stay informed'. The correction uses present tense 'helps' and corrects the phrase for clarity.

× Yes, because I am a person who always brought by curiosity and find out the injustice in this society and in the future if I will become a journalist, I will refer all of the injustice news in the modern society and corruption.

✓ Yes, because I am a person who is always brought by curiosity and finds out about injustice in this society, and in the future, if I become a journalist, I will report all the news about injustice and corruption in modern society.

The phrase 'always brought by curiosity' is awkward; 'is always driven by curiosity' would be better, but here 'is always brought by curiosity' is corrected to maintain original wording. 'Find out' should be 'finds out' to agree with singular subject 'person'. 'If I will become' is incorrect; the correct form is 'if I become'. 'Refer all of the injustice news' is incorrect; 'report all the news about injustice' is appropriate. These corrections fix tense, subject-verb agreement, and word choice errors.

× Yes, I just read a news about Donald Trump policy change of harvest students and I feel very unfair for the students who come from worldwide because it is our human rights for us to study in any other country and pursue the further education.

✓ Yes, I just read news about Donald Trump's policy change regarding international students, and I feel it is very unfair to the students who come from around the world because it is our human right to study in any other country and pursue further education.

'A news' is incorrect because 'news' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. 'Donald Trump policy change of harvest students' is unclear; corrected to 'Donald Trump's policy change regarding international students'. 'Feel very unfair for' should be 'feel it is very unfair to'. 'Come from worldwide' is incorrect; 'come from around the world' is correct. 'Our human rights for us' is redundant; 'our human right' is sufficient. 'Pursue the further education' should be 'pursue further education'. These corrections address quantifier misuse, article errors, and awkward phrasing.

× Not ready to be honest because most of my friends are not interested in news and they're not curious about what happened today.

✓ Not really, to be honest, because most of my friends are not interested in the news and they're not curious about what happened today.

'Not ready' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'Not really'. 'Interested in news' should be 'interested in the news' because 'news' is a specific topic here and requires the definite article. Adding commas improves sentence flow.

× Most of them attend to discuss about the K pop stars and social media occasions.

✓ Most of them tend to discuss K-pop stars and social media events.

'Attend to discuss about' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'tend to discuss'. 'Discuss' does not require the preposition 'about'. 'K pop' should be hyphenated as 'K-pop'. 'Social media occasions' is awkward; 'social media events' is more natural. These corrections fix preposition misuse and improve word choice.