News— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use simpler sentence structures and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details with proper linking words.

예시: Yes, I am very interested in news because it helps me stay informed about the world. I usually get news from social media, newspapers, and sometimes TV.

제안: Focus on clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, be specific about how you use these platforms to find news.

예시: I usually find news on social media platforms like Facebook, Instagram, and YouTube. These help me learn about world events and emergencies quickly.

제안: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary. Express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh'.

예시: No, I would not like to be a journalist because it is a very stressful job. I prefer to have a stable and less stressful career.

제안: Make your answer more concise and fluent. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unnecessary pauses or filler words.

예시: No, I didn't read the news this morning because I was busy with my routine. However, I usually read the news in the evening when I have free time.

제안: Try to speak more clearly and organize your ideas logically. Use linking words and avoid filler words to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: Yes, I often talk with my friends about viral news. We especially enjoy discussing funny news stories published in the media because it helps us relax and have fun.

× Of course news are so much crucial part for human being life.

✓ Of course news is such a crucial part of human life.

The word 'news' is singular and uncountable, so it should be treated as singular with 'is'. Also, 'so much crucial' is incorrect; 'such a crucial' is the correct phrase. Additionally, 'for human being life' should be 'of human life' for proper preposition use.

× I always try to find news in used to social media or sometimes newspaper and where time TV.

✓ I always try to find news using social media or sometimes newspapers and sometimes TV.

The phrase 'in used to social media' is incorrect; it should be 'using social media'. Also, 'newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers' to match the context. 'Where time TV' is unclear and corrected to 'sometimes TV' to indicate occasional use.

× I usually find news by using social media like Facebook, Instagram, YouTube that sells me to know about the world and emergencies and also sometimes I checking the platform about.

✓ I usually find news by using social media like Facebook, Instagram, and YouTube that help me learn about the world and emergencies, and sometimes I also check other platforms.

The phrase 'that sells me to know' is incorrect; it should be 'that help me learn'. Also, 'I checking' is incorrect; it should be 'I check'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× No, I don't like to be a journalist because that's a profession are so much stressful and I want to be more good, get a good job in life.

✓ No, I don't like to be a journalist because that profession is very stressful and I want to be better and get a good job in life.

'That's a profession are' is incorrect; it should be 'that profession is'. 'So much stressful' is incorrect; 'very stressful' is correct. 'Be more good' should be 'be better'.

× No, actually in the morning, most of the time I'm busy and rushed with my routine.

✓ No, actually in the morning, most of the time I'm busy and rushed with my routine.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context, so no correction is needed.

× I cannot, uh, properly, uh, read the news every morning and in this, uh, but uh, when I'm free most of the time in the evening, that time I read news.

✓ I cannot properly read the news every morning, but when I'm free, usually in the evening, I read the news.

The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper modal verb usage. 'Cannot' is used correctly, but the sentence structure is improved to sound natural.

× Yes, when the news is uh, viral that time I, me and my friends go see about it and uh, uh, most of the times we talk about funny news that uh, published in media and that's uh, time ways of, uh, we enjoy so much about this news and gossiping.

✓ Yes, when the news is viral, my friends and I look into it, and most of the time we talk about funny news published in the media. That's how we enjoy the news and gossip.

'Me and my friends' should be 'my friends and I' for correct pronoun use. 'Go see about it' is informal and unclear; 'look into it' is better. 'Most of the times' should be 'most of the time'. 'Published in media' needs the definite article 'the media'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.