News— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more fluent and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words for coherence. For example, start by stating your interest, then explain how you keep updated with news, specifying sources and types of news.

예시: Yes, I am very interested in news. Every day, I use news apps to check the latest updates, especially about local events in Hong Kong and national news. This helps me stay informed about what's happening around me.

제안: Avoid excessive hesitation and filler words. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain your routine. Be specific about the apps and how you use them to find news.

예시: I usually find news by downloading apps like BBC News. Every morning, I open the app and read the top headlines one by one to catch up on important events of the day.

제안: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your reasons and provide a concise explanation. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use appropriate vocabulary.

예시: I would not like to be a journalist because I don't think I have the necessary skills. Instead, I plan to become an accountant since I prefer working with numbers rather than writing articles.

제안: Work on fluency and clarity by reducing filler words and organizing your answer logically. Use linking words to explain the news you read and provide specific details clearly. Also, improve grammar and sentence structure.

예시: Yes, this morning I read some news about a tragic fire in Hong Kong. Unfortunately, many people died in the incident, which has been a very sad event recently.

제안: Try to speak more fluently and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific examples of how you discuss news with friends.

예시: Yes, I often discuss news with my friends because it is a good way to start conversations. For example, I usually share interesting local news stories to keep our discussions engaging.

× I am interested in news, so every day I will uh, review some data Daily News on the apps so, so that I can know uh, what's happened in the local and also I will uh, read some news about for my country, which are the Hong Kong lo local.

✓ I am interested in news, so every day I will review some daily news data on the apps so that I can know what's happening locally and also I will read some news about my country, which is Hong Kong local.

The phrase 'what's happened' is incorrect here because it uses the past participle 'happened' instead of the present participle 'happening' to describe ongoing events. Using 'happening' correctly indicates current or recent events. Also, 'about for my country' is incorrect; 'about my country' is correct. Additionally, 'which are the Hong Kong lo local' is unclear and corrected to 'which is Hong Kong local' to match singular subject and proper adjective use.

× I am interested in news, so every day I will uh, review some data Daily News on the apps so, so that I can know uh, what's happened in the local and also I will uh, read some news about for my country, which are the Hong Kong lo local.

✓ I am interested in news, so every day I will review some daily news data on the apps so that I can know what's happening locally and also I will read some news about my country, which is Hong Kong local.

The preposition 'about for' is incorrect; only one preposition is needed. The correct phrase is 'read some news about my country.' Using two prepositions together is grammatically incorrect.

× which are the Hong Kong lo local.

✓ which is Hong Kong local.

The subject 'which' refers to 'my country' which is singular, so the verb should be singular 'is' instead of plural 'are'. Also, 'lo local' seems to be a typo and corrected to 'local'.

× most mostly I will, uh, download the, uh, news app just like the, uh, BBC.

✓ Mostly I will download the news app, just like the BBC.

The phrase 'most mostly' is redundant and incorrect; 'mostly' alone is sufficient. Also, 'news app' is singular and correctly used here.

× So I just open it everyday morning and then I will review the hit news, uh, on the top and then one by one to browsing what happened, what happened today?

✓ So I just open it every morning and then I review the top news one by one to browse what happened today.

The phrase 'to browsing' is incorrect; the base form 'to browse' should be used after 'to'. Also, 'everyday morning' should be 'every morning' because 'everyday' is an adjective meaning common or normal, while 'every morning' refers to each morning. 'Hit news' is better expressed as 'top news' for clarity.

× then one by one to browsing what happened, what happened today?

✓ then one by one to browse what happened today.

After 'to' (a preposition or part of an infinitive), the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'to browsing' is incorrect; it should be 'to browse'.

× I don't like to be a journalist because, uh, I don't think I have the talents to become this and I'm marrying be accounting, so I wanna be a accountant in the future and I not really like to write something 'cause I don't think I have this talent.

✓ I don't like to be a journalist because I don't think I have the talent to become one and I'm going to study accounting, so I want to be an accountant in the future and I don't really like to write because I don't think I have that talent.

'I'm marrying be accounting' is incorrect; likely intended 'I'm going to study accounting' or 'I'm going to be an accountant'. 'Wanna' is informal; 'want to' is preferred. 'A accountant' is incorrect because 'accountant' starts with a vowel sound, so 'an accountant' is correct. 'I not really like' should be 'I don't really like'. 'This talent' should be 'that talent' to refer to something previously mentioned.

× I wanna be a accountant in the future

✓ I want to be an accountant in the future

The article 'a' is incorrect before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'accountant'. The correct article is 'an'.

× Uh, uh, this morning I just reviewed the, uh, news from Hong Kong cause recently date Hong Kong's happens a very, umm, uh, bad news cause the one, uh, parts just have the, uh, caused the fire.

✓ This morning I just reviewed the news from Hong Kong because recently in Hong Kong there has been very bad news because one part just had a fire.

The phrase 'Hong Kong's happens' is incorrect; 'there has been' is the correct present perfect tense to describe recent events. 'Just have the caused the fire' is incorrect; 'just had a fire' is correct past tense. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' for formal correctness.

× Lots of people die in this.

✓ Lots of people died in this.

The verb 'die' should be in the past tense 'died' to correctly describe a past event.

× So, uh, when I want to talk with other, I will try to share the local news with them.

✓ So, when I want to talk with others, I will try to share the local news with them.

The word 'other' is incorrect here; the plural pronoun 'others' should be used to refer to other people.