Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors that affect understanding. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid fragmented sentences and ensure your ideas are logically connected.

예시: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share my thoughts and experiences because they care about my life. For example, they often call me to ask how I am doing and what is happening in my life.

제안: Your answer is too short and fragmented. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Provide more specific details about what you share and why, to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: I usually share with my friends about dating and our future plans. Since we have just graduated from university, we often talk about our career goals and relationships.

제안: Your answer has good content but is affected by grammar mistakes and sentence fragments. Use complete sentences and linking words to improve coherence. Also, clarify your reasons with specific details to make your answer more effective.

예시: I prefer not to share details about my dating relationship because it is private between my boyfriend and me. I believe keeping some things confidential helps maintain trust in our relationship.

제안: Your answer contains unclear phrases and grammar errors. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Provide clear reasons and examples to support your opinion, and use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: I don't think more people will share cars because there are many transportation options available, like subways, buses, and Uber. Also, sharing cars can be uncomfortable for some people, so they prefer to travel alone.

× My parents always encouraged me to share about my life and thoughts because they are interested me a lot of curse their parents or me.

✓ My parents always encouraged me to share my life and thoughts because they are very interested in me, of course, as parents.

The phrase 'share about' is incorrect; 'share' should be followed directly by the object without 'about'. Also, 'interested me' should be 'interested in me' because 'interested' requires the preposition 'in'. The phrase 'a lot of curse their parents or me' is unclear and likely a mishearing; it is corrected to 'of course, as parents' to convey the intended meaning.

× They always call me. To know about my. Lipe.

✓ They always call me to know about my life.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. Combining the fragments into a single coherent sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think I usually share with my friends about. Dating boys. And future.

✓ I think I usually share with my friends about dating boys and the future.

The phrase 'share with my friends about' is acceptable, but the sentence is fragmented. Also, 'dating boys' is informal but acceptable here. The sentence is corrected by combining fragments and adding 'the' before 'future' to specify the topic.

× All is simply the future is the main topic because we graduated from university.

✓ Simply put, the future is the main topic because we have graduated from university.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'All is simply' is incorrect; 'Simply put' is a better expression. Also, 'we graduated' is changed to 'we have graduated' to indicate a recent past event relevant to the present.

× I prefer not to share about my dating relationship because.

✓ I prefer not to share my dating relationship because

The verb 'share' should be followed directly by the object without 'about'. The sentence is incomplete but corrected as per instruction.

× Is that thing between my boyfriend and I?

✓ It is a private matter between my boyfriend and me.

The original sentence is a fragment and uses the incorrect pronoun 'I' instead of 'me' after a preposition. The corrected sentence is complete and uses the correct pronoun.

× So I want to keep the privacy between us.

✓ So I want to keep the privacy between us.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× I think it is good for our relationship so I needed to. Stop talking.

✓ I think it is good for our relationship, so I need to stop talking.

The verb 'needed' is past tense, but the context requires present tense 'need'. Also, the sentence fragments are combined for clarity.

× Do you think more people will share cars?

✓ Do you think more people will share cars?

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× I don't think people will share occurs because there are many transportation nowadays such as subways, buses and Uber.

✓ I don't think people will share cars because there are many transportation options nowadays such as subways, buses, and Uber.

The word 'occurs' is incorrect; it should be 'cars'. Also, 'many transportation' is incorrect; it should be 'many transportation options' or 'many modes of transportation'.

× So I think doesn't need it to share cars each other because it's uncomfortable to each other.

✓ So I think there is no need to share cars with each other because it's uncomfortable for both parties.

The original sentence has incorrect subject-verb structure and pronoun use. 'Doesn't need it' is incorrect; 'there is no need' is correct. 'Share cars each other' should be 'share cars with each other'. 'Uncomfortable to each other' should be 'uncomfortable for both parties'.