Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然，如'shear'应为'share'，句子结构不够清晰。建议注意时态一致性，简洁表达观点，并使用更自然的连接词。

예시: Yes, my parents didn't directly tell me to share, but they taught me its importance through their daily actions. For example, they often share food with our neighbors, which helped me understand why sharing is valuable.

제안: 回答表达不够流畅，存在语法和用词错误，如'becauses'应为'because'，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并使用恰当的连接词。

예시: I usually share different things with my friends depending on what they like. For example, when I travel, I often buy postcards as souvenirs because they represent happy memories that I want to share with them.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如'resonate'用词不当，句子结构不完整。建议避免重复，使用准确词汇，并清晰表达原因。

예시: It depends on the person. For some friends, I prefer not to share painful memories to avoid negative feelings. For others, I avoid talking about my achievements because I don't want to seem like I'm showing off.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不连贯，句子过长且含糊。建议分句表达，使用正确语法，并明确观点。

예시: No, I don't think more people will share cars in the future because cars are private possessions. Also, different driving habits may increase the risk of accidents, and it would be difficult to determine who is responsible.

× Yes, they didn't directly tell me to shear, but they will teach me the importance of sharing during their through their daily actions.

✓ Yes, they didn't directly tell me to share, but they would teach me the importance of sharing through their daily actions.

这里的时态不一致，前半句是过去时，后半句用将来时不合适，应使用过去将来时would表示过去的习惯或倾向。

× they will share food with our neighborhoods.

✓ they will share food with our neighbors.

'neighborhoods'指的是社区，复数形式不合适，且此处应使用'neighbors'表示邻居。

× I think there is no exact range of gifts because I will share everything depending on I think they were like it.

✓ I think there is no exact range of gifts because I will share everything depending on what I think they would like.

句中缺少连接词'what'，且'were like it'语法错误，应为'would like'表示愿望。

× For example, when I travel I often buy postcards to give them as souvenirs becauses I think this is a kind of symbol as my my happy experiences in memories to share with my friends.

✓ For example, when I travel I often buy postcards to give them as souvenirs because I think this is a kind of symbol of my happy memories to share with my friends.

'becauses'拼写错误，应为'because'；'symbol as'应改为'symbol of'，表示象征。

× I think it depends on different person for For some friends, I prefer not to share my painful memories or experiences to avoid causing the negative resonate.

✓ I think it depends on different people. For some friends, I prefer not to share my painful memories or experiences to avoid causing negative resonance.

'person'应为复数'people'；'the negative resonate'用词错误，应为'negative resonance'。

× For others, I might not to talk about my achievements be 'cause I don't want to seem like I am showing off.

✓ For others, I might not talk about my achievements because I don't want to seem like I am showing off.

'might not to talk'中不应有'to'，正确用法是'might not talk'；'be 'cause'应为'because'。

× No, I don't think more people will share it in future because car is considered as a private possession and different drivers have different driving habits which will might increase the risk of car accidents and if that happens determine who is responsible to the. Accidents maybe?

✓ No, I don't think more people will share cars in the future because a car is considered a private possession and different drivers have different driving habits which might increase the risk of car accidents, and if that happens, it is difficult to determine who is responsible for the accidents.

'will might'是重复使用情态动词，应去掉一个；'car'前应加不定冠词'a'；'determine who is responsible to the accidents'表达不完整，应改为'it is difficult to determine who is responsible for the accidents'。