Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share because we have a large family. As I was growing up, I often shared my toys and food with my siblings, which helped me learn the importance of sharing.

제안: Your answer has unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Avoid confusing words like 'selling' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

예시: I usually share my food with my friends because sharing helps build a strong bond and creates a sense of closeness between us.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains repetition and incorrect word usage like 'selling' instead of 'spreading'. Try to be more concise and use correct vocabulary to express your ideas.

예시: Yes, I prefer not to share clothes with friends or relatives because sharing clothes can spread bacteria and cause diseases.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many incomplete sentences and incorrect word choices like 'selling car'. Focus on making complete sentences and using appropriate vocabulary to express your opinion clearly.

예시: Yes, I think more people will share cars because it saves money and helps build a sense of caring and community among people.

× Yes, my parents always encouraged me to, Sir.

✓ Yes, my parents always encouraged me, Sir.

The comma before 'Sir' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. Removing it improves clarity.

× Because we have a large family and as I was growing up I still most of my toys, even my food with my siblings, so my parents always encouraged me to serve.

✓ Because we have a large family, as I was growing up I shared most of my toys and even my food with my siblings, so my parents always encouraged me to share.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I still most of my toys' is incorrect; it should be 'I shared most of my toys'. Also, 'encouraged me to serve' is incorrect; it should be 'encouraged me to share'. Proper conjunctions and punctuation improve sentence clarity.

× I usually share my food with my friends because sharing is caring and selling of food with the fence.

✓ I usually share my food with my friends because sharing is caring and selling food with friends.

The phrase 'selling of food with the fence' is incorrect. It should be 'sharing food with friends'. 'Fence' is a mishearing or typo for 'friends'. Also, 'selling' should be 'sharing' to match the context.

× Increases the bond with their friend Ann and makes a sense of closeness with her friend.

✓ It increases the bond with friends and creates a sense of closeness.

The sentence lacks a subject and has unclear references ('their friend Ann', 'her friend'). Simplifying to 'It increases the bond with friends and creates a sense of closeness' makes it clear and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I do not prefer sharing clothes with my friends or with even with my relatives because as you know that sharing clothes means also selling the bacteria with the other people which causes different diseases.

✓ Yes, I prefer not to share clothes with my friends or even with my relatives because, as you know, sharing clothes can also spread bacteria to other people, which causes different diseases.

'Do not prefer sharing' is awkward; 'prefer not to share' is correct. 'Selling the bacteria' is incorrect; it should be 'spread bacteria'. Also, commas improve readability.

× So I prefer not sharing clothes with my friends or with my family.

✓ So I prefer not to share clothes with my friends or my family.

'Prefer not sharing' is less correct than 'prefer not to share'. The infinitive form is preferred after 'prefer'.

× Yes, I do think that most people would say that transportation with other people as it adds sharing cause means.

✓ Yes, I do think that most people would share transportation with other people as it promotes sharing and caring.

The original sentence is unclear and contains errors like 'would say that transportation with other people as it adds sharing cause means'. Correcting to 'would share transportation' and clarifying the meaning improves grammar and clarity.

× A sense of. A sense of caring towards other people. So say so.

✓ It creates a sense of caring towards other people, so sharing is beneficial.

The original is fragmented and unclear. Combining into a complete sentence improves understanding.

× Therefore selling car will help you to create a bond with others.

✓ Therefore, sharing a car will help you create a bond with others.

'Selling car' is incorrect; it should be 'sharing a car'. Also, adding a comma after 'Therefore' and removing 'to' before 'create' improves grammar.