Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share because they believe sharing helps build strong relationships. For instance, sharing with others teaches us kindness and cooperation, which are important in life.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to be more specific and organise your answer with linking words. Avoid vague expressions like 'and so on'.

예시: I usually share my clothes and books with my friends. For example, I lent a book to a friend because it contains many useful vocabulary words that helped him improve his English.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition and use linking words to connect your points.

예시: I prefer not to share clothes because people have different skin types and health issues. Sharing clothes might cause skin problems, so it is better to keep personal items private.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'change their recalls'. Try to give a clear opinion with reasons and examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I think more people will share cars in the future because it saves money and reduces pollution. For example, car-sharing services are becoming popular in many cities nowadays.

× Definitely, my parents always teach me about the sharing and I believe that sharing is caring and it always help us to build a wonderful relationship with the individual and I think that it is beneficial because individual can learn sharing as well as it is good for them.

✓ Definitely, my parents always teach me about sharing and I believe that sharing is caring and it always helps us to build a wonderful relationship with individuals and I think that it is beneficial because individuals can learn sharing as well as it is good for them.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'sharing' and 'individual'. 'Sharing' is an uncountable noun here and does not need 'the'. Also, 'individual' should be plural 'individuals' to refer generally to people. Additionally, 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× Definitely, my parents always teach me about the sharing and I believe that sharing is caring and it always help us to build a wonderful relationship with the individual and I think that it is beneficial because individual can learn sharing as well as it is good for them.

✓ Definitely, my parents always teach me about sharing and I believe that sharing is caring and it always helps us to build a wonderful relationship with individuals and I think that it is beneficial because individuals can learn sharing as well as it is good for them.

The verb 'help' should be in third person singular form 'helps' because the subject 'it' (referring to sharing) is singular.

× Definitely, my parents always teach me about the sharing and I believe that sharing is caring and it always help us to build a wonderful relationship with the individual and I think that it is beneficial because individual can learn sharing as well as it is good for them.

✓ Definitely, my parents always teach me about sharing and I believe that sharing is caring and it always helps us to build a wonderful relationship with individuals and I think that it is beneficial because individuals can learn sharing as well as it is good for them.

The word 'individual' should be plural 'individuals' to correctly refer to people in general.

× Well, there are ample of things which I share with my friends if I had to choose one.

✓ Well, there are ample things which I share with my friends if I had to choose one.

The phrase 'ample of things' is incorrect; 'ample' is used without 'of' when referring to quantity, so it should be 'ample things'.

× For instance, one of my friend want to my book which is wonderful and I helped him because of his study because there are a number of vocabulary provided in this book.

✓ For instance, one of my friends wanted to borrow my book which is wonderful and I helped him because of his studies because there are a number of vocabulary words provided in this book.

'One of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' because 'friends' is plural in this expression. Also, 'want' should be past tense 'wanted' to match the past context. 'To my book' is incomplete; 'to borrow my book' is correct. 'Study' should be plural 'studies' and 'vocabulary' should be 'vocabulary words' to be countable.

× For instance, one of my friend want to my book which is wonderful and I helped him because of his study because there are a number of vocabulary provided in this book.

✓ For instance, one of my friends wanted to borrow my book which is wonderful and I helped him because of his studies because there are a number of vocabulary words provided in this book.

The verb 'want' should be in past tense 'wanted' to maintain consistency with 'helped' which is past tense.

× For instance, one of my friend want to my book which is wonderful and I helped him because of his study because there are a number of vocabulary provided in this book.

✓ For instance, one of my friends wanted to borrow my book which is wonderful and I helped him because of his studies because there are a number of vocabulary words provided in this book.

The phrase 'want to my book' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to borrow my book'.

× Oh I personally believe that individual do not share their clothes because all individual have the different diseases and different problems and different skin tone of which is very.

✓ Oh I personally believe that individuals do not share their clothes because all individuals have different diseases and different problems and different skin tones which are very important for them to take care of.

'Individual' should be plural 'individuals' to refer to people generally. Also, 'skin tone' should be plural 'skin tones' to match 'different'.

× Oh I personally believe that individual do not share their clothes because all individual have the different diseases and different problems and different skin tone of which is very.

✓ Oh I personally believe that individuals do not share their clothes because all individuals have different diseases, different problems, and different skin tones which are very important for them to take care of.

The phrase 'different skin tone of which is very' is incomplete and incorrectly ordered. It should be 'different skin tones which are very important for them to take care of' to make sense and correct adjective order.

× Oh I personally believe that individual do not share their clothes because all individual have the different diseases and different problems and different skin tone of which is very. Prominent for them to take care. So I think that this is a specific thing which individual should not novel share with anyone.

✓ Oh I personally believe that individuals do not share their clothes because all individuals have different diseases, different problems, and different skin tones which are very important for them to take care of. So I think that this is a specific thing which individuals should not share with anyone.

The pronoun 'individual' should be plural 'individuals' to agree with plural possessive pronouns 'their'. Also, 'novel share' is incorrect; it should be 'share'.

× So I think that this is a specific thing which individual should not novel share with anyone.

✓ So I think that this is a specific thing which individuals should not share with anyone.

The word 'novel' is incorrectly used here; it should be removed to correct the sentence.

× Yes, in this contemporary era people can share cars and in the future they will also share cars becauses it is very common during these days to change their recalls.

✓ Yes, in this contemporary era people can share cars and in the future they will also share cars because it is very common these days to change their cars.

The word 'becauses' is a typo and should be 'because'. Also, 'recalls' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'cars'.

× Even most of times people get this in an emergency.

✓ Even most of the time people get this in an emergency.

The phrase 'most of times' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'most of the time'.