Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议简化句子，直接表达观点，并用连词连接句子，使表达更自然流畅。

예시: Yes, my parents encouraged me to share my belongings with others because they believe sharing helps build friendships. Therefore, I often share things when someone really needs them.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，句子过长且缺乏连贯性。建议使用简洁句子，明确表达原因，并使用连接词使内容连贯。

예시: I usually share my books with my friends because we all enjoy reading. Sharing books is convenient and saves money since we don't have to buy the same book individually.

제안: 回答重复且表达混乱，语法错误较多。建议简化表达，直接说明不愿分享的内容及原因，避免重复。

예시: I prefer not to share my personal photos because I am concerned about privacy. However, I don't mind sharing group photos taken with others.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，句子不够连贯。建议使用正确的句型，补充完整理由，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, I believe more people will share cars in the future because it is environmentally friendly. I also like car sharing during my commute to school and work because it saves time and reduces traffic.

× Yes, my parents used to encourage me to share my belongings with the others because they told me that when people we need is friends, they did.

✓ Yes, my parents used to encourage me to share my belongings with others because they told me that when people we need are friends, they do.

句子中时态使用不当，原句中“is”和“did”与主语不一致，应使用现在时态“are”和“do”来表达普遍真理。

× So I often try to share my belongings in for someone really needed and necessary.

✓ So I often try to share my belongings with someone who really needs them and when necessary.

介词使用错误，“share”后应接“with”表示与某人分享；“in for”不合适，应改为“with”；另外，句子结构不完整，需补充“who really needs them and when necessary”。

× I usually share my books with my friends because most of my friends who like to read books like me and it's a convenient to share the books together because we don't have to buy the sample it all together and sharing the reading experience is also in.

✓ I usually share my books with my friends because most of my friends like to read books like me, and it's convenient to share the books together because we don't have to buy the same ones all together. Sharing the reading experience is also enjoyable.

句子中“who like to read books like me”结构重复且冗余，应简化为“most of my friends like to read books like me”；“a convenient”错误，形容词前不加冠词；“sample it all together”应为“same ones all together”；“sharing the reading experience is also in”表达不清，改为“sharing the reading experience is also enjoyable”。

× My my personal photos, is that something that I wouldn't share with the others because it's about the privacy that I really concerned about and I would like to share the photos so that everybody took together, which is a group of photos about my personal photos I would not like to share.

✓ My personal photos are something that I wouldn't share with others because it's about privacy that I am really concerned about. I would like to share photos that everybody took together, which are group photos, but my personal photos I would not like to share.

句子中“My my”重复，应为“My”；“is that something”主谓不一致，应为“are something”；“concerned about”缺少助动词“am”；“would like to share the photos so that everybody took together”表达不清，改为“I would like to share photos that everybody took together”；“which is a group of photos”应为复数“which are group photos”。

× Yes, I'd be there for more people will share cars in the future because it's environmentally friendly and we should encourage this behavior.

✓ Yes, I believe more people will share cars in the future because it's environmentally friendly and we should encourage this behavior.

“I'd be there for”表达错误，应为“I believe”表示“我相信”；“will share cars”时态正确。

× And I myself also like to car share during my commute to school and work because it is more time.

✓ And I myself also like to car share during my commute to school and work because it saves time.

“it is more time”表达不正确，应改为“it saves time”表示节省时间。