Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors such as incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. To improve, use correct verb tenses and simpler, clearer sentences. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure your answer is concise and directly addresses the question. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, my parents encouraged me to share when I was a child. For example, they often shared things with our neighbours, and my mother always told us to share toys and stationery with our siblings. Because children tend to imitate adults, I naturally followed their example.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. To improve, complete your sentences, use correct verb tenses, and provide specific examples. Also, avoid vague phrases and ensure your answer is coherent and relevant to the question.

예시: When I was at school and university, I usually shared textbooks, pens, pencils, and snacks with my friends during breaks. Nowadays, since I work in a hospital, we often share medical supplies and advice to help each other.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences and confusing vocabulary (e.g., 'parrots' likely a mistake). To improve, clarify your ideas, avoid incomplete sentences, and use appropriate vocabulary. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

예시: Yes, there are many things I prefer not to share because they are personal. For example, I would not share my clothes due to hygiene concerns, as sharing clothes can spread germs and infections.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. To improve, complete your sentences, use correct grammar, and link your ideas clearly. Provide specific reasons and benefits of car sharing to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I believe more people will share cars in the future because many are concerned about environmental issues. Carpooling helps reduce traffic congestion and air pollution, which benefits society as a whole.

× my parents share lots of things with our neighbors

✓ my parents shared lots of things with our neighbors

The sentence refers to a past event ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Also, 'parents' is plural, so the verb should agree in number and tense. 'Share' is present tense; it should be 'shared' to match the past context.

× children are copycats, they are interested in following their parents footsteps

✓ children are copycats, they are interested in following their parents' footsteps

The phrase 'parents footsteps' requires a possessive apostrophe to indicate that the footsteps belong to the parents. This is a plural possessive form, so an apostrophe after 'parents' is necessary.

× my mother always told us share our toys, our pants, pencil with our siblings

✓ my mother always told us to share our toys, our pants, and pencils with our siblings

The verb 'told' requires the infinitive form 'to share' after it. Also, 'pencil' should be plural 'pencils' to match the plural items 'toys' and 'pants'. Additionally, 'pants' is plural, so it is correct, but 'pencil' should be plural for consistency.

× my parents share lots of things with our neighbors

✓ my parents shared lots of things with our neighbors

The action happened in the past ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'shared' instead of present tense 'share'.

× When I was younger during school and university time, I regard that we shared our textbook, pens, pencil and also we shared our snacks during the break and we had a very long time on that time

✓ When I was younger during school and university, I recall that we shared our textbooks, pens, pencils, and also our snacks during the break, and we had a very long break at that time

The verb 'regard' is incorrect here; 'recall' or 'remember' is appropriate. 'Textbook' and 'pencil' should be plural to match 'pens'. The phrase 'we had a very long time on that time' is awkward; it should be 'we had a very long break at that time' for clarity and correctness.

× Nowadays since I work in hospital, we often share our.

✓ Nowadays, since I work in a hospital, we often share our things.

The phrase 'work in hospital' requires the article 'a' before 'hospital'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'share our.' which is incomplete; it should specify what is shared, e.g., 'share our things.' Also, a comma after 'Nowadays' improves sentence flow.

× Yes, there are lots of thing, it's personal

✓ Yes, there are lots of things, it's personal

The phrase 'lots of' should be followed by a plural noun, so 'thing' should be 'things'.

× For instance, we cannot share all those parrots

✓ For instance, we cannot share all those parts

The word 'parrots' is incorrect in this context; likely, the intended word is 'parts'. This is a vocabulary error affecting pronoun reference and meaning.

× And also the other thing that I like to mention is our clothes because I'm worried about the hygiene of this clothes

✓ And also the other thing that I like to mention is our clothes because I'm worried about the hygiene of these clothes

The demonstrative pronoun 'this' should be plural 'these' to agree with the plural noun 'clothes'.

× and we can when people share these items with each other, they can get lots of.

✓ and when people share these items with each other, they can get lots of infections.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. It should be restructured to 'and when people share these items with each other, they can get lots of infections' to complete the thought and improve clarity.

× Yes, and nowadays most people, they are worried about them and they have lots of concerns about environmental issues

✓ Yes, and nowadays most people are worried about the environment and have lots of concerns about environmental issues

The phrase 'worried about them' is vague; 'the environment' is more appropriate. Also, 'most people, they are' is redundant; 'most people are' suffices.

× Carpooling can help the society because it's reduced traffic jam and traffic congestion

✓ Carpooling can help society because it reduces traffic jams and traffic congestion

'It's reduced' is incorrect; the verb should be in present simple 'it reduces' to indicate ongoing effect. Also, 'traffic jam' should be plural 'traffic jams' to match 'traffic congestion'.

× So this action result in reducing the air pollution and it's really

✓ So this action results in reducing air pollution and it's really beneficial

The verb 'result' should be 'results' to agree with singular subject 'action'. The phrase 'reducing the air pollution' is acceptable but 'reducing air pollution' is more natural. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'beneficial' completes the thought.