Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「share many things to other people」は「share many things with other people」が正しいです。また、例の説明ももう少し明確にすると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share with others. For example, I often lend my textbooks to friends when they lose theirs at home.

제안: 回答に多くの「uh」が含まれており、流暢さが損なわれています。また、文が断片的で繰り返しが多いです。より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけ、具体的な内容を盛り込むと良いでしょう。

예시: I usually share cartoons with my friends, especially one of my best friends. We enjoy reading them together and discussing the stories, which is always a pleasant experience.

제안: 文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、「underwears」は「underwear」が正しいです。また、理由の説明ももっと明確にすると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I don't like to share my clothes. When I was a child, my brother often asked to borrow my T-shirts or underwear, but I felt uncomfortable because I think clothes should be personal and clean.

제안: 文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。例えば、「Sharing a cars with many people is a very unnatural」は意味が通りません。より明確で論理的な説明を心がけましょう。

예시: Yes, I think more people will share cars because parking fees have increased significantly over the past 10 or 20 years. Sharing cars can help reduce daily expenses, so I believe this service will become more popular in the future.

× Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share many things to other people and for example, I always share my textbooks to other friends when they are lost it in their home.

✓ Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share many things with other people. For example, I always shared my textbooks with other friends when they lost them at home.

The sentence mixes past and present tense inconsistently. 'Encouraged' is past tense, so subsequent actions should also be in past tense for consistency. Also, 'share many things to other people' should be 'share many things with other people' because 'share' is followed by 'with' not 'to'. 'When they are lost it in their home' is incorrect; it should be 'when they lost them at home' to correctly use past tense and pronouns.

× Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share many things to other people and for example, I always share my textbooks to other friends when they are lost it in their home.

✓ Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share many things with other people. For example, I always shared my textbooks with other friends when they lost them at home.

The verb 'share' is followed by the preposition 'with' when indicating the person receiving something, not 'to'. Also, 'lost it in their home' is incorrect; it should be 'lost them at home' to correctly refer to textbooks and location.

× I always share, uh, cartoons with my friends, uh, especially, uh, one of my best friends.

✓ I always share, uh, cartoons with my friends, especially one of my best friends.

The sentence is acceptable but removing unnecessary fillers improves clarity. No singular/plural error here.

× I like to, uh, read, uh, some books and uh, cartoons, uh, here. And I always just share it and, and talk about them.

✓ I like to read some books and cartoons here. I always just share them and talk about them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to multiple items ('books and cartoons'). It should be 'them' to match the plural antecedent.

× I don't like to share my clothes. When I was a child and my brother always wanted me to share my T-shirts or sometimes underwears.

✓ I don't like to share my clothes. When I was a child, my brother always wanted me to share my T-shirts or sometimes underwear.

The word 'underwear' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form 'underwears'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by removing 'and' and adding a comma.

× I was very astonished at the disorder because it is simply dirty and I want to wear the clothes out which someone has.

✓ I was very astonished by the mess because it was simply dirty, and I didn't want to wear clothes that someone else had worn.

'Astonished at the disorder' is better expressed as 'astonished by the mess'. 'It is simply dirty' should be past tense 'it was simply dirty' to match the past context. 'I want to wear the clothes out which someone has' is awkward; it should be 'I didn't want to wear clothes that someone else had worn' for clarity and correctness.

× Sharing a cars with many people is a very unnatural so that they can reduce their expenditure for every day.

✓ Sharing cars with many people is very unnatural, but it can help reduce their daily expenses.

'A cars' is incorrect; 'cars' is plural and does not need an article 'a'. Also, 'for every day' is better expressed as 'daily'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Sharing a cars with many people is a very unnatural so that they can reduce their expenditure for every day.

✓ Sharing cars with many people is very unnatural, but it can help reduce their daily expenses.

The conjunction 'so that' is incorrectly used here. 'But' is more appropriate to contrast the unnaturalness with the benefit.

× So I think the service will spread in the future.

✓ So I think the service will spread in the future.

This sentence is correct in future tense and needs no correction.