Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "my mom and dad" and "my father" in the same answer. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share. For instance, when I was little, my father bought me a toy plane and asked me to play with my cousins.

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and repetitive. Try to use linking words like "because" more naturally and avoid run-on sentences. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as "my clothes fits" should be "my clothes fit."

예시: I usually share my food with friends. Sometimes, I also share clothes because my friends are the same size, so we can wear each other's clothes.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, "I'm a kind of an introvert person" should be "I'm somewhat introverted," and "keep my feelings reserve" should be "keep my feelings reserved." Use linking words like "but" and "because" properly to improve flow.

예시: Generally, I like to share physical things like clothes and food, but I prefer not to share my feelings because I'm somewhat introverted and tend to keep my emotions reserved.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid phrases like "No more opinion." Instead, clearly state your opinion and support it with reasons. Also, correct grammar and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: I don't think more people will share cars. As people earn more money, they prefer to buy expensive cars and avoid sharing them to prevent potential accidents or damage.

× when I was little and my father bought me toy plane, he asked me to play with it with my cousins

✓ when I was little and my father bought me a toy plane, he asked me to play with it with my cousins

The phrase 'toy plane' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× because my friends are same size as me so my clothes fits them

✓ because my friends are the same size as me so my clothes fit them

The phrase 'same size' requires the definite article 'the' before 'same size' to be correct. Also, 'clothes' is plural, so the verb should be 'fit' instead of 'fits' to agree in number.

× and because my friends are same size as me so my clothes fits them

✓ and because my friends are the same size as me, my clothes fit them

Using both 'and because' and 'so' together is redundant and incorrect. The sentence should use either 'because' or 'so' to connect clauses properly. Also, a comma is needed after the dependent clause for clarity.

× and because I'm a kind of an introvert person so I keep my feelings reserve

✓ and because I'm a kind of introverted person, I keep my feelings reserved

Using both 'and because' and 'so' together is redundant. Also, 'introvert person' is better expressed as 'introverted person'. The adjective 'reserved' is needed to describe 'feelings' correctly. A comma is also needed after the dependent clause.

× I keep my feelings reserve

✓ I keep my feelings reserved

The word 'reserve' is a verb or noun, but here an adjective is needed to describe 'feelings'. The correct adjective form is 'reserved'.

× No more opinion. People will not save cars because as people earn money, they like to buy expensive cars and so whether it can lead to potential accidents or damages to their car.

✓ No more opinion. People will not share cars because as people earn money, they like to buy expensive cars, and this can lead to potential accidents or damage to their cars.

The sentence has several issues: 'save cars' should be 'share cars'; 'and so whether it can lead' is unclear and incorrect; 'damages' should be 'damage' as an uncountable noun here; 'car' should be plural 'cars' to agree with 'people'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.